She sat there in loneliness waiting for the clock to strike twelve
Sick and tired of everything going on in her world
Time felt so slow passing by with no sound, no other sense of life other than her bleeding eyes and heart inside
She escaped her hell as she unlocked the door to reveal a new realm never seen before
She had been locked inside her room for years, she had forgotten what the real world is
There was no one home except herself, her parents had been long gone hours ago
Suddenly feeling content yet anxious she fell into subconscious oblivion
Walking out into the fresh new air she felt the trees giving her death stares
With each slow step down the outdoor stairs, she felt revived after each breath
A deep weird feeling inside restrained her from passing the shiny gate before her
So she took a deep breath to overcome and make the feeling stable
Out she walked into the real world, not looking back on the years before, where she felt scared and mentally dead, they were now purely torn down to shreds happily though she forgot what got her in that condition initially
Treading on the footpath under the silvery moon, dark shades of green filled her pupils with shadows of darkness in her eyes and behind her
She stumbled onto a stone before her
Footsteps heard behind her ears gave shivers and goose bumps so deep and sincere
She turned her head around to see who it was in the rear
A reflection of a metal blade illuminated by the night’s light protruded from a man’s coat
Then it hit her why she had locked herself out so long, now regretting ever coming out of her dark lonesome room, out of her shell where she used to dwell
There was quick flash of light, a last moment for her sight
Her head had a fatal concussion, nearly crushed by hard soled boots and a stab in the spine filled in the mood
The stranger picked up the fresh new corpse and carried it to his slaughter house
He impaled her body through the core and devoured it as a main course meal
Author notes
xxforest fairyxx
I know that this is more a short story than a poem but i just got carried away with my imagination while i was composing it so I utterly forgot about the form of literature. LOL
A contest entry
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Comments
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Bloody good read...
Most delicious.
Your brain is wonderfully vile.
Wolf
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Lots of fun!
I appreciate someone that has a good time with the dark. Keep pennning poetess!
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Thanks for your comment!
~Emily~
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Hopes and dreams smashed, litterally.
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siick<
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I could really see this as a movie.. You did a good job with the imagery and flow here.. Nice and dark. You did a wonderful job.. Thank you very much for sharing..
Angel
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this is very very well wirtten and i enjoyed reading it: its very good and kept me reading thanks for entering
all my love
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great write but a little too gory for my tast,thanks for entering. -
lovely
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a triller for a dark side
interesting and ..ummm tasteful
Riftkin
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Dark & Scarey
Thank you for posting for us to read, it was dark & delightful...he was so greedy....the whole body! Damn....novy
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I like the narrative that you have created here. Thank you for entering this contest just a note to ask you to check that you have followed the rules - I wish you the best of luck when it comes to judging!
Keep writing
Polly
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Thank you
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that would be a great scary movie!
it reminded me a touch of that poor sweet girl they found
locked in a basement for all her life never knowing
what lay outside if it was worse then what she was living
because she spent her whole life in there and had nothing
to compare it too...did you see that story on the news?
way to write....you captured and pulled us in!
ears/Seattle
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Thanks for your comment
I did hear about that story on the news, a man who had an incest relationship with his daughter in Austria....Utterly horrible...
Anywho thanks for reading and commenting, it's really appreciated
~Emily~ xx
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scary and dark. You really take the reader along on a horrific journey....very dark and nicely done, I liked some of the descriptive words you used.
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Well poem or not this was greatly written. You use so much imagery in your poems. Its like the power of description is your personal poets tool. I like that about you, I can picture exactly what you write every time. This one is no different.
Silvos.
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it's ok. Almost everyone wrote a story insterad of a poem. I'm prefering poetry, but im sure it'd be difficult to write everything in poetic form so i don't mind a good story, thanks for entering
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ok thanks for acknowledging.
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