Here I am waiting...
What's wrong with I am worrying...
From my stay till my sleep I am wondering...
Still about that I am thinking...
Here I am missing...
Just for you I am writing...
Author notes
I make this in midnight...
My boy didn't reply my message for a day...
I keep sent him messages,but not one of them be replied..
I don't know where these words came in...
Just feel like to write and these words like came with a lamp of ideas...
I lOVE HIM..I LoVe him so much...
Maybe it's a short one...
But what do u think?
I am not a good poem maker,so i need suggestions from u guys..
Thank you for read this...
I hope you'll like it...
-love
A contest entry
- Give me what you got...3 by Luckintheshadows.
525 points, ended July 17, 2008, 23 entries
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900 points, ended September 1, 2008, 35 entries
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need a help for the title...
Comments
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I did ask for rhyme only and this has a kind of slanted rhyme going for it. The thoughts are a bit choppy but that adds to the style. thank you for entering
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it's a nice title!!!
Thanks for the suggestion...^^ -
I'd call this poem 'Thoughts' if it was mine
I like the kind of brokenness of this poem, literally feels like notes jotted on a piece of paper, and turned into beauty. I love how your lines leave the reader thinking.
Thanks for sharing this, and taking the time to enter my contest,
Luck.
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