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~ Adam ~ ( HM )

Today,

Head bowed hands behind back,

Teared showers fell from Heavens gate,

Crowds lined streets,

As your Oak set casket,

Adored coloured bouquets,

Framed a picture,

Resting.

 

Silent sobs raised on shoulders weep,

Chorus of Motorbikes,

Leather uniform,

Fine tuned song,

Rev up engines,

Become your guide,

and the followers soldier on.

 

The road is long,

Bending at the curb,

And, the mourners take the signal,

Slowly moving on.

 

Friends so young,

Come together as one,

To pay their last respects,

A hard hitting realism,

that one of their own has gone.

 

May your soul that was taken,

On that fated day,

Rest in tranquil settings,

By the crystal aqua lake,

and the Dove of Peace,

Become your wings to fly.

 

 

 

 

 

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Laid to rest today .. 9th July 2008
Tragically taken from his loving family and friends.
Just 18 years old

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  • Midnite wolf gold member
    July 18, 2008
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    a fantastic tribute hun, such warmth in those heartfelt words. hugs to you n your son. x


  • onesugar gold member
    July 10, 2008

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    I went through the same thing when I was 16. I lost my best friend in a car accident, we had just left school. She was about to start training for the police force. I know how your son feels.
    You have done this with such warmth, tenderness love and compassion it brings tears to the eyes. It is so sad when a young life is taken...I believe his journey is just beginning.
    Good luck with this in the contest. A beautiful tribute and so worthy of the gold.
    ~sugar~


  • Beret55 silver member
    July 9, 2008
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    A great trebute. That my friend was very nice, warm and heartfelt.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    July 9, 2008

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    Oh honey I know

    I so grieve for your sons and the family so stricken at this time . God Bless you all and keep you safe and help the young know they will meet again at heavens gate .


  • Zero the Hero silver member
    July 9, 2008

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    Nothing much to say really except .. im sad for the loss of their friend and another young life gone .. but the teens have also lost thier innocence and immortality which is hard to come to terms with .. Sleep well Adam bon voyage ....


  • SingPraiz4Hym
    July 9, 2008

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    Wow, this is very very emotional write and I did feel the words so deeply and teared up since I could visually see what you were sharing. I'm sorry for the family's loss here and truly feel the pain they are bearing. This is excellent and I hesitate to say that in light of the topic here. Thanks for sharing this heartfelt piece. Good luck in the contest and may God hold you close.


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    July 9, 2008

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    awwwwwwwwwwwww this is sooo good.. and just aww. sad..... beutifuly written though...... thanks for sharing this wonderful piece and thanks for entering and good luck in contest.......!

  • imahealer
    July 9, 2008

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    Any poem about a young soldier losing his life due to a war that has already taken far too many, breaks my heart. When the soldiers return home, alive, I have been at the airport, and hugged them with tears streaming down my face. You have penned a poem, that is a reflection of the compassion in your heart. Yes, I cried reading your words. When a poet can evoke emotions so vividly, that says a lot!
    I love you!

    Sis XOXO


  • Swtpoetryman
    July 9, 2008

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    MAY ADAM REST IN PEACE, JULIE! THIS IS A BEAUTIFUL TRIBUTE FOR ONE WHO HAS LEFT THIS WORLD SO YOUNG.

    Friends so young,
    Come together as one,
    To pay their last respects,
    A hard hitting realism,
    that one of their own has gone.

    May your soul that was taken,
    On that fated day,
    Rest in tranquil settings,
    By the crystal aqua lake,
    and the Dove of Peace,
    Become your wings to fly.

    I believe that his spirit will SOUR into the sky on a Harley with wings where he will ride with the angels and shine on like the sun in a garden on a cloud where he may sit and sing with George and John - and to put a kettle on the boil for all that will follow him!
    Peace & Love - to you - and to all who have taken that peaceful ride into Heaven - and to all who will follow - when their time has come!

    This is more than worthy of the GOLD, Julie - and is filled with such tenderness, compassion, love, and devotion - and perfectly painted images, too! I tear came to my eye as I could see myself standing beside you as Adam was laid to rest!
    Peace & Love!
    Earl.


    THE GATHERING (c) 2004 by Earl F. Hubbard Jr.
    (from HEART & SOUL)

    May they rest in peace
    Until we see them again
    With all of the gang
    At the gathering.

    They are the
    dearly
    departed,
    that we
    are longing
    to see.

    At the end
    is when,
    the beginning
    will
    be.

    efhjr.


  • maralisa silver member
    July 9, 2008

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    julie you are in my thoughts this poem is sad full of sad emotions from the heart and the last stanza is so beautiful
    As your Oak set casket,Adored coloured bouquets, Framed a picture,Resting.Silent sobs raised on shoulders weep,Chorus of Motorbikes,A hard hitting realism,that one of their own has gone.
    May your soul that was taken,On that fated day,Rest in tranquil settings,By the crystal aqua lake,and the Dove of Peace,Become your wings to fly.good luck in the contest my friend take care marina


  • daviscth silver member
    July 9, 2008

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    This had to have been a heartbreaking funeral to attend sis. It's so sad and your poem tells the story very well.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    July 9, 2008

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    Mum this is an incredible moving & a very emotionally powerful piece. I had to stop reading it twice and go back to it, it brought me close to tears. losing someone so close and so young to death is a very hard thing to cope with. you and your family are in my thoughts and prayers.

    my condolences

    love you

    kat


  • LadyDementia gold member
    July 9, 2008

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    A painful poem to read yet so beautifully written. This really cuts to the core. Good luck in the contest


  • Roaddog Wolf
    July 9, 2008

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    felt sorrow

    from this write. Don't know who's funeral or if this was just depicting a funeral but it was written with the sorrow of one well done


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    July 9, 2008

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    I have just sat down to read this. This is very very sad indeed. Your words really puts the reader there Julie, on the day of the funeral. Such a sad and heartbreaking piece this is. Good luck in the contest Julie.

    Love
    Always
    Wayne Leon


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    July 9, 2008

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    Beauiful

    A beautiful, heartfelt composition--I love the last stanza--
    "May your soul that was taken,
    On that fated day,
    Rest in tranquil settings,
    By the crystal aqua lake,
    and the Dove of Peace,
    Become your wings to fly."

    Gold in my opinion!!--Well Done !!!




  • Angelflower
    July 9, 2008

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    Hun this was just screaming of sorrow.. You did such a wonderful job with this.. The image just brought an ache to the heart.. I really loved this. I wish you the best of luck..

    Angel

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