She pours herself
into my life
one dream at a time
Her eyes
see through my heart
while I see into her soul
her hand on my thigh
my sigh
her smile
she says
"Hey you"
Please tell me what you think
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The first three lines are very special.
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As always amazing write.
Lucky is She.
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Excellent free verse my friend.
Line breaks move this piece to perfection. I loved it - just loved it. Expertise is so evident. Well done. A moving and well written verse. ~Pamela
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Nice bit of 'free '...always interesting to read yours as you're such a good rhymer!
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Bingo!
After the first 11 words you could have said anything and it wouldn't have mattered to me what you wrote.
Even it is brevity, this has a beginning, a middle and an end.
It's beautifully crafted, I think.
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You dreaming again!
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