Your losing grip of reality,
And your only seventeen,
You feel like jumping,
Letting go,
All you want to do is fall.
The days waste away,
And your hope is gone,
Time means nothing,
As the light fades,
And a cloud grows over.
Speak to me.
Don't let things hold you back,
Let it go, let it go,
Just go back to sleep,
And move along,
Fast and free.
Your heart is broken,
You've used all the glue,
It's falling to pieces,
And you know your dying,
Feeling so cold and alone.
Your hands are shaking,
Trying so hard to forget,
The pain won't stay down,
It seeps through the hole in your chest,
Where your heart once lay.
Speak to me.
Don't let things hold you back,
Let it go, let it go,
Just go back to sleep,
And move along,
Fast and free.
It isn't over yet,
Things can go wrong,
And you may lose control,
But just let it go,
And move along,
Move along,
Move along,
Just move along.
Author notes
Lyrics at: http://www.plyrics.com/lyrics/allamericanrejects/movealong.html
A contest entry
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Comments
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This was really good
It wasnt too close to the song so your okay there, but it was just a plain good poem
I think the flow was good as well
so cheers and thanks for the entry
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this was very hopefully written. It starts out sad and then somewhere somehow, the light turned on and hope blasted its way through the darkness. Loved it.
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Ahhh I loved this ! You did this so beautifully. Incredible, you really have a way of portraying songs. & What do you mean this isn't great? It's amazing. Especially for a first attempt :]
"Your hands are shaking,
Trying so hard to forget,
The pain won't stay down,
It seaps through the hole in your chest,
Where your heart once lay."
My absolute favorite part of this whole poem. Those lines really hit me hard; I can relate so well. Excellent write. Keep writing Thanks for entering & best of luck to youuu love ! ♥
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