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House [Dark]

dark
 
Thoughts penetrated by scars unseen,
yet those who think I'm smiling don't know
that inside, I choose to bleed
 
Forsake my house and all who dwell there
My pain is their pleasure
 
Some leave scars with blades and bad relationships
I find my pain in parents who don't want me
 
 

Author notes

Pic credit: Dolls Asylum by edera-ladygoth

comes from this contest: http://allpoetry.com/contest/2413256

Lowercase Prelude
"Cut out my eyes so I can't see this cruel world hates me"

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Comments

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  • mrs. random silver member
    July 23

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    I see that you've won more than one trophy for this poem. It was well deserved. The last line really hit home for me. My biological father failed me..in all walks of life but my new daddy adopted me and for once I'm loved by a parent....I almost cried at this. Lovely.

    Warmest,
    Mylee

  • Iloveugh
    July 22

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    Great i seriously loved this and the picture. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
    ..<3..
    Shelly

  • Lowercase Prelude gold member
    July 21
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    thank you

  • ElegantlyDangerous
    July 21
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    Amazing! I like this and pretty picture good job<3


  • Miss Masquerade
    July 10

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    This hit really close to home, I'm sure you heard that a lot, but.. it really does. Your emotions came across loud and clear, the picture is beautiful as well. Haha, good luck.

  • Sensual Angel gold member
    July 10

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    this hits so close to home for me.. the emotions are quite strong, very powerful. they literally jump right off the page with this poem of yours.

    its the scars that others don't always see, but they are there and we are the ones who can't forget.

    excellent job with the prompt..

    Congratulations on the Honorable Mention.

    kat


  • VampireBrat
    July 9
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    wow that is the only word i can think to describe it!

  • garde a l eau
    July 9

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    A dark paintaaing and a dark poem to suit. This reminds me of "Christina" another painting that challenges the observer to look inward.

    Your words leave the ache and haunt of an abandoned heart, that could hold so much warmth and glory if only seeds of love had been tended.


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    July 9

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    Wow!

    this left me speechless....I also love the image. It falls in perfectly with the piece. I can relate to this piece as well....Some leave scars with blades and bad relationships
    I find my pain in parents who don't want me
    very deep and full of emotions. Awesome write. BRAVO!!! ~mandie~

  • spideracer gold member
    July 9

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    Great

    The photo and your words fit very well, like they were meant to be. Your imagery is perfection at its best. Well done.


  • PhantomsAngel87 Greeters member
    July 9

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    Whoa.
    Amazing poem! The imagery and emotions just pour over me and nearly drown me.
    I love this line:
    "I choose to bleed" Shocking and fabulous!


    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • Lowercase Prelude gold member
    July 9
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    really? sorry. i didn't purposefully break the rules.

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 9

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    So sad! That kind of pain cut deep scars indeed!! A lot of darkness in this.. excellently done..

    Over the word limit, but an emotional and deep take!


  • Hekate gold member
    July 9

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    That kind of pain really does suck. This one hit very close to home with me. The images, and reality in this poem are great!
    Good luck.

  • Lowercase Prelude gold member
    July 9
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    oh yeah. thanks for reminding me

  • Hekate gold member
    July 9
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    Don't forget to let her know if u want light or dark

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