In most cases, love seems like a dangerous flower.
At first look it seems benign and jovial.
You feel yourself yearn for a more unveiled view.
But as you move closer, the flower becomes more obscure.
Its distinct kindness replaced by a seemingly vindictive nature.
It becomes colourless and its lavender fragrance becomes acidic.
This flower at first caused palpitations and zeal
But now only causes pain and heartache.
The only thing this dangerous flower can be called
Is love, before and after the fact
Author notes
abc list benign, jovial, yearn, unveiled, obscure, kindness, vindictive, colourless, lavender, acidic, palpitations, zeal.
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It's just a lot of words and it doesn't do anything for me, sorry.
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Wow
I am loving your vocabulary in this piece. Though, it makes me happy because i don't have to look in the dictionairy. I'm proud that i can understand it. hehe.
This is very lovely indeed. Oh and Palpitations, is an amazing word.
"Its distinct kindness replaced by a seemingly vindictive nature.
It becomes colourless and its lavender fragrance becomes acidic."
Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest. -
so true. love really is like a dangerous flower. so beautiful that we can't resist but can hurt you if you're not careful
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Quite good poem
Quite a sting in the tail in this one well written but
might have been better in rhyme. good luck in the contest George -
Quite good poem
Quite a sting in the tail in this one well written but
might have been better in rhyme. good luck in the contest George -
Quite good poem
Quite a sting in the tail in this one well written but
might have been better in rhyme. good luck in the contest George -
whoa! I wrote a similar poem but i use roses instead. This is way better then mine! It's beautifully written.Flow very nicely. love every word of it!
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I know how that is, love is a very dangerous flower indeed, I've been pricked by it so many times and I swear that it's poisonous, as it can be so cruel and hurting.
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