I.
destined to be
the little match girl,
face pressed against the pane
aching to be invited in
i peddle on the street
whoring for dimes on the dollar
go away,
you don't belong here
II.
my art
flesh offerings
living
real
while insiders, pedigreed
powwow breeds
assert their right
to be dead, they
hawk genuine imports
only effort, to remove
the 'made in Taiwan' tag
getting fat from
the gambling house
squandering the culture,
old ways passed over, for new
who will teach the children?
III.
i'm a tree with two roots
that span an ocean
neither one strong enough
to choke the other
too embedded, to intertwine
A contest entry
- Spirit by Nicole Hanna.
4000 points, ended July 13, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beautiful, evocative, deeply emotional, political, relevant.
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This is so very well written. Deserving of the gold.
Joe
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This is a superb poem my friend. The imagery is stunning, allowing the reader to see all that is written. Sorry for the span of time since I've been to your pages. You are an exceptional artist, and I have missed your muse. Exquisite work!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Thank you so much and no need for apologies. It's hard to keep up, isn't it? lol. I'll be visiting soon.
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I love the way you've brought the matchstick girl into this, an eerie, poignant tale. The title adds the good ol' political dimension, its pretty open and raises many questions....to be vague :S.
I wish I could structure poems like this, the divides are perfect...
The last stanza just does it for me, gives the whole thing broader metaphorical relevance, so well done.
My comments suck so let me just say: I love this.
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A metaphorically interesting poem . . . good job!
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Thanks
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Lots of strong lines in this one, but from the middle on is where I'm a particular fan of this piece. Powerful imagery and a story that has the ability to suck a reader in. Thanks for entering
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Thanks I cut a couple of words, hope that's ok.
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I loves that title...
And the contents that follow.
You rocked it girl
☼Becky☼
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Thanks, Becs. That little guy is cute...I'm gonna have to learn how to do that one.
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