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I am not your Sunday
kind of woman.

I do my praying
on the run,
if I remember to pray at all,
and when I do pray,
it’s because I am shit deep in trouble
or I am so scared I don’t know
what else to do.

The truth, my friends, is the truth.

I like to drink my brandy warm,
not always in a glass,
which makes me feel more sexy
than I am
and a bit more powerful.

sex, alcohol, power...I understand now!
If you do, then my hat's off to you.

Sunday kind of women love love.
They milk it, bake it,
zip it up in fresh locked bags,
pull it out for family photographs
and stitch it up into quilts

but not me -
I want love to make me growl
hungry.
I want it to chase me
into storms, knock the moon
right out of the sky

I want love to open me up
with a clam knife,
suck up my innards, toss me
exhausted into a big feather bed.

No, I am not a Sunday kind of woman,
the Devil can attest to this -
he’s scratched my name on many a tree,
rode me hard through hell and back
and driven me like a chariot of fire
across God’s starry night,

What I am is a woman alive,

flawed, perfect, as warm as

the dirt I fill my hands with,

sometimes cold as ice

 

a woman to contend with

any day of the week.

 

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  • JinSays gold member
    September 14

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    but not me -
    I want love to make me growl
    hungry.
    I want it to chase me
    into storms, knock the moon
    right out of the sky

    I want love to open me up
    with a clam knife,
    suck up my innards, toss me
    exhausted into a big feather bed.



    See?
    I love this. You got it. Enough said.
    Fucking amazing girl, Shine on you gorgeous Diamond...WOW!
    Ahem, sorry, yeah. I'm so so so so so glad you entered Lane, best wishes girl
    jin


  • Emerald Dog
    September 13

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    Your poem oozes the crackles and sparks that all gold winners should possess. Upon reading this, I have no doubt that you do too.


  • Slayer gold member
    September 13

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    Lane, I know you're a woman, but this poem has balls! Absolutely brilliant!
    Congrats on the gold.

    Slayer

  • WildStyle
    September 11
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    Awesome

    I'm a fan of this one. I was hooked from the word go. You are one helluva woman


  • sandybeaches gold member
    September 7
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    This is so damn good! Pam


  • parenchma
    September 6
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    Excuse me, I must go check the panel for blown fuses.

  • nevadapoet gold member
    September 5

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    I recognize your writing almost instantly now...this one screams your name and boy does it scream loudly. This piece is so powerful and playful, yet delicate and sultry. It makes a statement about the confidence you have for yourself and your authenticity...a real woman wrote this. thank you Lane for the entry...the pleasure was all mine.
    Nevadapoet


  • Daizee
    July 21
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    Who wants typical and ordinary anyway... be as you are

  • SweetJane
    July 18

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    This poem is probably one of the best ones I have read so far of your poetry. I really like this, it has a voice and I can really feel the power in it. It is sad, melancholy, but truly a deep poem. Nice work.

    SweetJane


  • Gratitude
    July 18

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    Sex, alochol, power... I understand now! Love this poem up to here for its frank grittiness. Then you lose it, I'm afraid but I do like "I think Wednesday, with one foot into Thursday"


  • nilav
    July 17
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    very interesting with a different kind of thought....


  • arafura
    July 16

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    Powerful and compelling. There's an honest ring to this and a sense of what a real woman is. Excellent!

  • awesome..I am a Friday partying till Sunday woman!!
  • birds
    July 15

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    dragging a bit

    that's a powerful phrase, no matter how minute it may have been for the poem.
  • Alpha-Q
    July 12

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    Perfection is not an absolute condition, it is only a suitable condition. Although this may not be the best comment ever written, it is perfect for this poem. Perfection is relative to context. Is the response true to the stimuli? If so, it is perfect. Like this poem.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    July 12

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    I once prayed to God as my ears rang, surrounded by the sounds of mortars and machineguns reverberating throughout a sweltering hot rocky canyon (can’t tell you where) but my point is, I survived, and I’m convinced ‘He,’ God, exists, but I digress…
    Your writing style is wholly unique Lane, and, always a distinct pleasure to read.


    Love and peace always,
    Mj.


  • Moqui Takoda
    July 10

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    Yep ... ya know that woman on yer author page, the one sitting on the sand, probably, but just glistened with water from a tide coming in and taken at the out swoosh? or whatever you ocean guys call it ... well, i started to think of her as being like this instead of like that: she is underwater, and the camera is off to her left about twenty feet lower and upside down and she is slowly turning in the water at high noon, slightly gray perhaps, to even out the lighting since the sun tends to grab at one place and diffusse away from the center of its brilliance when yur underwater,,, anyhow sorry ... but anyhow, with this in mind, do ya think maybe she is experiencing all that has ever been, for that's what the ocean carries, and that includes birth. The picture is birthlike. This poem is a continuation of life after a birth, and it is probably a lot like a baby's first glimmer of light, maybe not, but maybe .

    oh, three turtles for the poem, too


  • awesome

    If I could only capture these thoughts and moments as concise and elegant as you, I'd be satisfied. Instead, my writing pours out in story more than poetry. I've missed reading your work, I should stop by more often than I do.

    Rory


    • Dalaney gold member
      July 11
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      Rory...

      Thank you, but no one can write story poetry like you...I have been and will always be your biggest fan Have a great weekend! Don't fall off the boat Love, Lane

  • moonbumps silver member
    July 10
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    I think God has the edge here lovely Lane...
    Love Hilly xxx


  • sheltered
    July 9
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    This sounds like a real and heartfelt battle
    that rages on the minds of us all a time.


    • Dalaney gold member
      July 9
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      hey, thank you for reading. I'm tired of poetry that says nothing. I want to start saying something even if it isn't pretty. I have read your work and I think you know what I mean. Thanks again for the read and the applause Love, Lane

  • Jersene silver member
    July 9
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    I love the honesty of your poetry...

  • Lovely imagery, perfect flow, bold, strong words. Very well done.


  • tomisb gold member
    July 9

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    Perfection was the Devils creation. It is all about not being good enough and most people are. Alot more than most people would think.

    God save me from those who would save me.

    I don't know about prayer but I learned when laid up with a broken leg that learning to give thanks made a lot of things easier. 'nuff said.

    Oh, I always thought you were perfect any day of the week, but I probably was using the wrong calendar.

    Love, Tom B.

  • going to church makes you a christian as much as standing in a garage makes you a car (not my quote, heard it somewhere) ... anyway, this is one of the finest pieces i have read from you ... almost seems you let go of what you thought poetry should be, and let your true talent speak ... if you can relate ... feels pretty f'ing good, doesn't it?


  • nordicsky silver member
    July 9

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    Hi lane,
    Sometimes your poetry is sexy and sensual, occasionally it’s sad and reflective, but today it’s funny and thoughtful.

    I like the fact that She only gets a phone call from you when you’re in shit deep trouble or scared.
    I also like these lines...

    “I don’t know if I will ever find
    a man as intriguing
    as something I cannot even hear or describe,
    but it is blue and vast and mind blowing.”

    I don’t think I can comprehend this either, but I’ll keep trying.

    Thanks for posting this,
    Love, Peter

  • forty-one
    July 9

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    That's my girl! This piece is such a sophisticated write. So many times before have I said you are such a magnificent writer... in my eyes, you are required reading. What you do with words is beyond extraordinary... capturing what you want to say, and putting it into words that exhibit the qualities of the emotions you wish to convey. This is just a beautiful, and honest descriptive piece. There is no more to say than that. Nothing but love for you, here!

    41


  • JohnnyD gold member
    July 9

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    Simply wonderfully composed, like gentle whitecaps on a spring sea. vastness, endless vastness, mother of all that is great and good.



    len

  • this is excellent, what an enjoyable read...you always write such interesting poems, always creative & unique, best of luck in the contest..

  • Reviewing on the run, stuck in an internet cafe in the North of Scotland...

    I think you went up a gear here. This poem sparkles with light mischief and deep meaning. I love it.


  • daviscth silver member
    July 9

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    WOW!!!!!!! I have no words that haven't been said before.......

    Perfection my dear Lane is hard to come by and yet you do it so easily.

  • authenticiy shows

    Well, there you are.
    Another poem that hasn't been written before.

    It flows and its images are consistent top to bottom.

    I love this one.


  • ea silver member
    July 9

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    This is really such a fun glimpse into you. I really was sold on this by the time I got to my favorite line, "think Wednesday with one
    foot into Thursday" and then the ending sentiment summed it all up perfectly. Delightful.

  • Unique!

    A polaroid...a one off...indeed you are

    Love
    Sue

  • WOW Lane, ....just wow. I have no words! And I'm the kind of person who likes to give detailed comments.

    This, is poetry! I loved every word.

    S. P. ~

  • Enjoyable. It fits like a woman with a mission and a banjo.

  • Awesome!!!!

  • As always, I am so pleased with your honest approach and conversational voice.

    I am sitting here trying to figure out what kind of a woman I am... which day would suit me best. Fun analogy to think about.

    Anyway, the poem was delightful.


  • zochit2me gold member
    July 8

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    Son-of-a-bitch!
    This is freaking awesome Lane...
    I loved it from the beginning until the totally awesome ending...
    Bookmark material...



    ☼Becky☼


    • Dalaney gold member
      July 9
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      Becky...

      lol...Thank you! Your comment made me sit back and smile. Love to you, kiddo, Lane
  • Brilliant !

    "and I write poetry about it from a room
    overlooking what I love
    the most - I don’t know if I will ever find
    a man as intriguing
    s something I cannot even hear or describe,
    but it is blue and vast and mind blowing."

    Such beautiful yet melancholy words these are.
    I do hope you find that someone who can sweep you up in the vastness of his arms, with love that washes over you like steady waves caressing a moonlit shore. Beautiful piece this is indeed. Soft yet holding a certain amount of power at the same time ~Bret~


    • Dalaney gold member
      July 9
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      Bret....

      I so appreciate your thoughts on this piece. Thank you very much for reading and for the clappies Love, Lane
  • My Lady

  • That, is poetry
    All this time i was not aware that i was looking for a Wednesday woman with one foot into Thursday, but now I know I shall always carry a calendar with me to check

    Great stuff, as always.
    Jeff


  • breedluv silver member
    July 8

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    Oh, I love this poem, Laney. I am also (sometimes) an oh-my-God-please kind of prayer. "The truth, my friends, is the truth" shows your self-realization. I completely understand the Weds to Thurs description. I hope your day is as tranquil as the sea you adore.


    • Dalaney gold member
      July 9
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      Russell...

      Your comment is wonderful. Thank you so much. Love, Lane
    • Must be something about women named Delaney, for too know a Delaney who adores the sea.
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