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In The Rain Under the Oak




I decided to stop
by today,
even though
it is raining-

as each drop
rolls along my skin,

it's as if I am
being cleansed
in a spiritual shower-

a calming comfort
washes over me-

the robin stops by
to serenade me
with his song

I don't know if
you have anything,
to do with this,

but if you do,
all I can say
is a humble
thank you

I love you
my friend.


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Number 20 in The Journal Under The Old Oak

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  • Swtpoetryman
    August 27
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    all I can say
    is a humble
    thank you

    I love you
    my friend.

    All I can say is a humble THANK YOU, N'Yetta - for writing and sharing these wonderful OLD OAK pieces as they all leave me with a peaceful, easy feeling - that I'd write a song about if The Eagles hadn't done so first. Now that I've made it to 20 - what does that leave? 30 pieces or more, I believe until I get caught up with these.
    Love & Peace!
    Earl.


  • Lord Bobo the Girl silver member
    July 9

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    Great poem. I liked the imagery. And the bit about the robin's serenade. Good write. Thanks for entering.

  • Desire gold member
    July 9

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    Magnificent!!

    Beautiful piece You have penned Precious one and Love the emotions in this like all Your versese
    Another Journey- with Your special Friend
    Love this!!
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Amera gold member
    July 9

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    This is beautiful! The poem almost reads like a whispered prayer. Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • myron
    July 9

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    Oh yes - what a beatiful, sensual poem. I like the fact that it shows what is happening rather than telling the reader what to think or feel. this is what good poetry is, i reckon.

    I felt like i was out there in the rain with you moving along with you on your journey.

    The robin verse has lovely resonance - romance and friendship and a feeling of optimism is what i perceive from these lines.

    The poem works rally well up until the final bit:

    I love you
    my friend.

    This may be important for you to say to your companion, but i'm not sure it's needed in the poem. The thanks in the previous stanza and the images evoked so nicely throughout the poem already conveys this sentiment to me.

    very well done,
    myron.

  • Carolina Moon silver member
    July 8

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    Oh Nettie, I just love the feeling in this one....sigh, just peacefulness. Great job!!!!
    and love
    just me.


  • Walking shadow
    July 8

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    Very kind and gentle

    Your voice is loud and clear. You do not need to shout but I can see that loving words in your work. You are an inspiration for many. I support you in your efforts 100 percent. Indeed a great poem in a very good book. Good luck and congrats to all the work you done.
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