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Captured

Your sleek and sultry curves have captured me.
Reaching my neck I watch as you go by.
Gone in a moment oh, so gracefully,
Ever so smooth you float, you glide, you fly.
Readjusting my tie, I  long to be,
Going towards the open horizon's sky. 

 

On sweetest flights of fancy you comply,
No worries as together we unwind.
Out in the open air just you and I
Treat ourselves to freedoms trail so fine.
The impetus which forces me to try,
Enchanted, how I crave to make you mine.

This greatest love the world has ever seen,
Sublime love for the sweet Porsche nine-fourteen.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Harrisham Sonnet

Harrisham Sonnet poetry form was created by Indian poetess ~ Harrisham Minhas.

Harrisham Sonnet is written in 3 stanzas consisting of 2 sestets and a couplet.

For each of the stanzas, the last letter of the first word of each line is the first letter of the first word of the next line.
There is no restriction on the starting letter of the first line in each of the stanzas.

There is no restriction on the syllable count in this form, but it is required that the poem should have a good rhythm to it.


Rhyme scheme:

First stanza : ababab
Second stanza: cdcdcd
Third stanza: ee


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  • Harrisham Minhas
    July 27

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    There is a wonderful personification of your beloved car in this poem.
    You have nicely expressed your fondness for it.
    Its a smooth write.

    You have applied the rules of Harrisham Sonnet correctly.

    Thanks for your entry.

    Harrisham Minhas


  • Harrisham Minhas
    July 22
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    Oops...you have got the rhyming scheme correctly, but some correction needs to be done in the starting letters of line 4, 5 and 9 (example: line 4 should start with the letter 'E' according to the rules.)

    Please rectify it within 24 hours.

    • PerVirtuous Allan gold member
      July 22
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      I think I've done it. Ha ha ha. This is my first one. I forget what I am supposed to do sometimes.

  • Harrisham Minhas
    July 20
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    Please rectify it soon.

  • Harrisham Minhas
    July 10
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    Please arrange the lines according to 2 sestets and a couplet and apply the corresponding rhyming scheme:

    First stanza : ababab
    Second stanza: cdcdcd
    Third stanza: ee

    I will come back to comment on the poem.

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 9

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    lol.. a very smooth ride indeed through this poem! Made me want to go out and test drive a Porche!


  • myrataal silver member
    July 9

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    Of course a car ...

    is a good substitute in curves ... sometimes a costy one. I think a man who loves his car this much, need no other curves at all.

    Good poetry.

    Love
    Always Myra


    • PerVirtuous Allan gold member
      July 9
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      Amera used to race Porsches. I wrote this to make her smile. I am not so big on cars. Thanks for the comment.

  • Amera gold member
    July 8

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    I love this poem! Damn! You really know how to pull my trigger. This is the only Harrisham Sonnet I have ever read that is any good. I personally think the form is awful but you actually made a meaningful poem out of it. Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • intanglio2ring
    July 8

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    That's a smooth move in your vehicle

    Wonderful cars - takes a bit of care though -but she sure does hummmmmm! Written with style
    Good Luck in the contest
    Tang

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