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Destiny and Fate

 Two long roads,

crossed in the middle,

on one side was a fair maiden,

named Destiny.

On the other side was a sour maiden,

named Fate.

Destiny had long, flowing auburn hair,

with a rose vine crown atop her head,

she had a lavender gown, that seemed,

to be made of wind and water.

Her eyes were a soft earthy brown,

kind and pure.

Fate had short, black hair,

with a dress that seemed to be made of,

fire and rain,

her eyes were a disturbing electric green,

that seemed to penatrate your thoughts.

 

A man was following Destiny's road,

a look of urgency across his face,

longing burning brightly in his eyes.

He came to the cross road,

and a look of confusion,

came across his face.

Which way was he to go?

He looked into the trees, hoping to find the answer.

 

Then Destiny spoke,

her voice as sweet as roses,

"You have come to the cross roads,

of myself, Destiny, and my sister, Fate.

You can escape neither one  of us,

whichever road you take,

you find both of us at the end."

The man was transfixed.

Then Fate spoke,

her voice was full of rage,

but oddly quiet,

"These roads will cross again,

only not under your notice,

they will slowly dwindle into one,

so you will meet both,

one way or the other."

They spoke together.

"You must choose dear sir,

which road you are going to take,

will your destiny come to terms with your fate?

Or will you have your fate come to terms with your,

destiny?

It is already set in stone,

what fate will bring when it clashes with destiny,

and what destiny will do when it clashes with fate."

Destiny spoke solo again,

"Follow my path,

and you will find what you seek,

but at the price of not knowing the,

consquences."

Fate spoke solo once again,

"Follow my path,

at the price of knowing wath will be the consquences,

of eventaully following your destiny.

The pain of that,

I must warn you,

is unbearable,

while the other way around,

could cause insanity."

 

The man looked from one maiden to the other,

even more unsure of what path to take,

was he willing to risk insanity?

Was he able to take intense pain?

He thought for a long time,

and finally concluded,

to take Destiny's road.

The sisters looked knowingly at eachother,

as they watched the man go on his way.

The man walked for days on end,

and as promised,

he didn't notice the two roads,

merging together.

As he got closer and closer,

to clashing with Fate,

he began to wonder frantically,

what was going to happen next,

when he would find what he was seeking.

He began to go insane,

and the pain of that was unbearable,

he had clashed with Fate.

The two sisters appeared to him,

"You see,

there was no way to avoid either one,

longer then the other.

You chose to risk insanity,

thinking that would have saved you from now,

from unbareable pain,

but you were wrong.

If you had gone the other way around,

you would have gotten the pain,

and would have gone insane from the pain."

There is no way out of meeting both,

Destiny and Fate.

 

 

Author notes

Written out this is about 4 pages long.
I have no idea what I was thinking when I wrote this, and I know most of it doesn't make a lot of sense but if you read it carefully, you will see how it does in a strange way. I wrote from 12 am- 1 am. I think I was part dreaming when I was writing this since it is so odd.
Thanks for reading if you got this far.

Written-5/5/08

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  • BonFireDancer
    March 27
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    I really really really like it!!! It's amazing, but very disappointing that there is no happy ending. But that's how some things have to be. Good job.

  • ScaryGothMother
    February 2
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    awsome. loved it. couldnt stop reading till the end was very long but worth it


  • toomysterious
    January 19
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    Very interesting poem and it does make sense in a bizarre way. I enjoyed it very much.


  • Rhythm Child
    November 22, 2008

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    i loved this poem, such originality and i loved the way you have personified fate and destiny and i thought the descriptions were very accurate

    this was sooooo original and im so pleased u joined
    a great write definately one of my faves

    take care


  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    November 6, 2008

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    This was a bit rambling for my tastes and again, Spell Check! Thank you for your entry but this is not really what I was looking for! Sorry!!

  • Mickie27
    November 1, 2008

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    Fantastic. I love it it really makes you think. You did a great job! Thank you so much for the read.


  • cindyloo
    October 18, 2008

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    this is wonderful. Very beautifully written. It holds the reader's attention until the end. I really like the meaning. It is very thought provoking. Great job!


  • dove94
    October 14, 2008
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    this is amazing
    =]


  • Maybe.I.Am.Broken.
    July 29, 2008

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    Woah...This is a BRILLIANT write...makes you think, and think a LOT.
    Keep on writing and I'll keep on reading
    My favorite part:
    "As he got closer and closer,
    to clashing with Fate,
    he began to wonder frantically,
    what was going to happen next,
    when he would find what he was seeking.
    He began to go insane,
    and the pain of that was unbearable,
    he had clashed with Fate."
    Brilliant piece.

    ILY
    Annie Shadows

    ♥♥♫♥♥


  • Brit-Girl
    July 24, 2008

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    this is a beautiful story. the tale you weave is intricate and dashing and I love your meaning, I love this poem! THanks for writing and thanks for sharing Write on!


  • my.stars.dont.shine
    July 22, 2008
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    wow; this is amazing. very creative.


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 20, 2008
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    Great poem. I like how you personified Destiny and Fate


  • Dragonheart1 gold member
    July 9, 2008

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    Very good poem on destiny and fate. Both have different types of suffering..I think i'd rather suffer pain than insanity though if i kknew what lie ahead...


  • Anewor gold member
    July 9, 2008

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    Wonderful!

    This is so full of creativity and I love the conversations that take place between the 3 characters! Absolutly wonderful, and wonderous! When Fate speaks about following her path, there is a mspelled word. (what). Other than that this is great!


  • Maedes
    July 9, 2008

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    brilliant & interesting...so destiny and fate is like enjoy and pain in loving someone

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    July 8, 2008

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    Wow this is just wow I am at a lost for words I am impressed I love you and I am very proud of you love you always

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