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Treason of Duty

angel
 

Refusal to accept what
has already come to pass
Engaging from the backbone
of this being's frame

"I don't want to bear such a name"

Thoughts dripping on glass, like melted wax
Charged by anger and selfish desires
Despite the power it beholds,
nothing could keep this emotion in control

"Quit calling me an angel"

Rip off the wings, though I may bleed
I am satisfied that my normality has come to be.
 

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Pic Credit: http://ihni.deviantart.com/art/Angel-1-59856495

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  • movedon
    July 23, 2008

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    "Quit calling me an angel"

    Rip off the wings, though I may bleed
    I am satisfied that my normality has come to be.

    I...I...oh wow. That last part really...wow. My fiance calls me his angel all the time and it kinda of put a new spin on that. You are strong, never forget that.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • satan-
    July 14, 2008

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    Oh wow, I love this poem! This could evoke so many different feelings, depending on how you choose to interpret your words, but any way you do it, it still conveys a general sense of not wanting to be different. Love it, your words are SO powerful. Thanks for entering!


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    July 11, 2008

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    Thoughts dripping on glass, like melted wax
    Charged by anger and selfish desires
    Despite the power it beholds,
    nothing could keep this emotion in control....Rip off the wings, though I may bleed
    I am satisfied that my normality has come to be.

    These lines are so filled with a deeply embedded emotion...I was saddened and can still feel the emotional barrage of it even now after finishing the read. Great great piece Best of wishes in contest. ~mandie~


  • penman gold member
    July 9, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Such a powerful creation for the picture. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • alesana
    July 8, 2008

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    Holy crap

    Ive been reading peoples stuff all day. by far my favorite great write. Metal lovers rock!!!!
    Do you like beneath the sky, darkest hour, or all that remains


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 8, 2008
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    Why thank you. Your comments mean alot to me.


  • XxemohatexX
    July 8, 2008

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    "I don't want to bear such a name"Thoughts dripping on glass, like melted wax
    Charged by anger and selfish desires
    Rip off the wings, though I may bleed
    are my favorite lines this is great exceponal and i would not have expected anything less from you i love your poetry my fav line is the sacond to last lineit is totaly my type of poetry this looks very profesional i think you should try to go futher than allpoetry and get some publushed and out there to the world your a very talented wrighter and i hope it doesnt go to waist


  • LivinitupCutie
    July 8, 2008

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    This is so in depth..the emotion just still lingers even when I'm done reading it..sad beautifully written..thnak you for entering my contest..and good luck!!!

    Lieu


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 8, 2008

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    Excellent Write!

    Thanks for sharing, and all the best to ya in the contest!

    Peace, Timothy

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