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Stupid Fate


So we are meant to be together
Though everything stands in our way
Every obstacle that can possibly exist
Lies in down at our feet so that we clumbsily might fall.
When we hide away
And try to forget about the world
It's pestering hand creeps in from the shadows of the room
And thuds our bare shoulders.
I'd love nothing more than to lay for hours
Repeating a loving pattern
Of brushing your hair from your face
And kissing you on the tip of your nose
Or tasting the damp warmth of your lips
Anything to be close to you
Without no one there to stop us.
Yet you stand so strong
With your priorities ahead of everything.
And I feel so small
Cause I can't stop myself from wanting to touch you
And you fall into the distance
Further from this lonely island where I reside
And cast into the back of
A locked closet at the end of the hall
Is everything that we shared
As if it was nothing at all.
Stupid Fate.

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I just wrote...freestyle, unplanned. Be easy on me...havent written in 2 years.

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  • iverbthenoun
    July 12, 2008

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    clumbsily > clumsily?
    It's pestering hand creeps > Its...?



    umm i don't like the way it ended. the ending sounds rather forced. but i like where you went... i especially liked the "shoulders" image good luck!