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S.O.S. {Strength over Struggle}

Heatless savagery 
of deaths primeval design,
The fluttering of glowing angel
wings, seems so distant
behind teary eyes.

As many struggle too
finds life’s punch line,
glorious hallelujah’s echo
through the daybreak.

Casting away ancient struggles,
light and dark unsheathe their
swords once more, within
minds riddle with sorrow.

Follow me to eternity
wherever that may be.
Where struggles can become
strength and the holiest of lights
will exorcise all fears.

I hear you’re S.O.S.

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  • afroqban
    October 15, 2008
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    this packs a punch. im diggin your mind my friend


  • thelordreigns gold member
    July 12, 2008

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    This is a very fine and powerful write.

    "Where struggles can become
    strength and the holiest of lights
    will exorcise all fears."

    That is the place of salvation. Well done.

    - jo -


  • Desire gold member
    July 11, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: S.O.S. {Strength over Struggle}
    This piece tugged hard at my Spirit, I read Your words several times and I Love the second to last line-that grabbed me and reference to exorcise all fears Your beginning line prepares the reader for as I call reality- the world can be a savage place-with many struggles- I imagine there are others who could relate to what You speak-The last line shows to me, You have Compassion- I'm Blessed You are here
    Excellent Voice to Inspire
    Powerful images You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    July 11, 2008
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    Great write keep listening.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    July 11, 2008

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    Very god work here

    We see with our eyes the wrongs of this world we reach out to help those so lost to find hope for sure .I hear your words of finding the light and Bless you for you will see that if you are sick or I am sick the healing through love comes from you and me


  • Rose Angel gold member
    July 11, 2008

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    I like this write very much! Life and death is very real, and they both have "a punch lines" You do not get negative about the issue. I do know there is eternity, but God dwells there and I do know that He is ever ready to listen if we will call out to Him...I do appreciate your write!


  • Solo Wisp gold member
    July 9, 2008

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    Love the diction you bring to this poem ... also imagery sprouts wings and flies succinctly through my mind.

    'Casting away ancient struggles ...' powerful ... yes.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    July 8, 2008
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    Nice. I like the title alot. It goes well with the poem. Great job.


  • Arkbear gold member
    July 8, 2008

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    Thank you for sharing this with us......with me.......as I see both sides of your thoughts.....and truth ~

     

    Many will only hear the hallelujahs of praise......yet, so many are struggling to fiond something to hold on to....even if it's a smile for a moment ~

     

    I am not critiquig work my Friend, only giving thanks to all of you who support Life, over death ~

     

    God bless you,

     

    Bear ~

     

     

     

    Follow me to eternity
    wherever that may be.
    Where struggles can become
    strength and the holiest of lights
    will exorcise all fears.

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