A sultry maiden dark,
lovely locks, flowing hair,
glinting eyes lights do spark,
Oh! gentlemen beware!
Beware she's the Cajun Queen,
known in the French Quarter.
Gorgeous, but Oh! so mean;
breaks hearts... all that court her.
Rumor says Mulatto born,
neither black neither white.
Between the races torn,
in the south what a plight.
A rare beauty, no doubt,
her looks surely do deceive.
"Come hither", she will flout,
then alone, she will leave!
A contest entry
- Who Is She? by Gypsie Ink.
300 points, ended July 18, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round one (for everyone) prewrite contest ENTER ENTER ENTER (AND YES THAT MEAN'S YOU too by serenity silvermoon.
927 points, ended February 16, 1509 entries
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Powerful!
Alluring and stunning. Perfection. Thank you for your entry and Best of luck in my contest. -
Wonderful write... your flow is superb and the rhyme sounds natural... rolls of the tongue beautifully
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She's the type of lady you just watch and smile politely from the other end of bar. Even an old fool like me knows when to leave well enough alone..lol. Good luck in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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'A sultry maiden dark,
lovely locks, flowing hair,
glinting eyes lights do spark
Oh, gentlemen, beware!'
Beware, beware!
Her flashing eyes, her floating hair!
Oh...my, such a bewitching queen you are!
I'm afraid I might request to be your slave....
Kisses...all over, honey!
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Nice job.
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Very nice... sounds like it was written from the voice of experience (LOL). Well conceived, well rhymed, and I'd bet well received...
Ken
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