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Atonement Through Death

Missing image

shrinks by the dozen;
rehab with my cousin

 

a family curse

to ride in hearse 

 

tag - I'm it!

now ain't this shit!

 

nobody left to share a hit

I'm a worthless two-bit, stinkin' whore,

beaten and branded, can't take no more.

"hope", a word, saved for the ill;

"death", painless, with my poisoned pill.

 

even sewer rats have a place to call "home"

mine'll be six feet under in freshly dug loam.

not a single back-stabbin' friend to call my own,

throat arched, dry gulp, eternal sleep, alone.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Pic is prompt ~ The suicide files: n.1 "4of5" by ~cdurocher

A contest entry

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Comments


  • Ithica silver member
    July 19

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    Yikes!!! This is about as down and out as you can get!!! And I think we all have entertained such thoughts for many reasons, but thank heavens we never acted upon them... Very raw and real!!!


  • unsigned gold member
    July 12

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    okies....It has it's moments, but some of the rhyme really doesn't work...nice write either way

    Thanks
    for the entry ....and agony...no not really!

    Simon

  • leo2
    July 10

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    I hate to admit but thoughts such as this dared to surface recently when I was struggling with my own self worth demons. Good luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    July 9

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    whoa~

    Whoa
    What an eye-opener poem you have penned with this prompt sis..
    Excellent imagery...could envision this as I read it...
    The last few words got me tho...probably cause I can relate being close to being there so many times
    Eternal sleep,alone....
    Gave me the chill bumps....
    Best of luck in the contest..this is a winner in my book
    Love ya
    Your sis
    Susan~~~

    PS I wasn't thinking when I capitalized the title in my newest poem..went back and corrected it...thanks for the reminder...
    Love you again
    Susan~~~ and give Stella a big kiss from Auntie Sue
    and for me Stella
    You have yet to read my Vampire story.....