my hands are tied
I can not breathe
unbound me please
and set me free
my heart cries out
my soul is dying
my abuser holds me
here in hiding.
A contest entry
- PIcture Prompt (whatever you take the pic as) by xXDarkChildXx.
1200 points, ended July 8, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Best Pre-Written Rhyme by Piccola.
800 points, ended August 15, 106 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
picture was found on a free fairy site.
Comments
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congratulations on the silver. This is short but filled with emotion. thank you for entering. I enjoyed the subtle rhyme. Maybe a different line break though ... it looks like free-verse until it's read. Line breaks or stanzas would help give it some power too I think
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Wonderful
very creative and so well expressed. Congratulations on the silver.
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It is really great.
This is a really great write. The poem held me from start to finish. How is your wrist?
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It screams with such truth
This piece says it all in fewer words but it truly screams with truth about the pic . Great work here
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Great flow, and amazing job.
Great job and good luck
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awww wonderful flow, and such emotion you poured into this, lovely job and good luck in the contest
take care
stephanie
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this is very well written Rheea-on the outside i got the feeling of a physical abuse but after a few more readings i am left with a picture and a deeper darker sense of mental abuse-either way a good take on this prompt...peace to you and yours.
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Oh, so different, yet sad. This is very emotional, in the very few lines. Very well written, I loved the whole entire thing! Excellent job! Thanks for entering =) Keep on writing, until you can't no more!
xXDCXx
~Make Peace, Not War~
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