had sapphires, lovers,
outlaw fragrance, chaotic treasures
but baby dreams
he’d offed
wove a duck
he’d once loved,
its slow, purposeful churn
he started swaying
Author notes
my pet duck, Poofer ..
In a list
A contest entry
- Challege #1: a poem in 25 words by Virgoan.
600 points, ended July 31, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Had the appearances of happiness and success, but it was a pet duck that makes you sway -> their pace it amazing... we had runner ducks.
Congratulations on the bronze.
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This one is quite interesting. Congratulations on your trophy
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The light enigma within a well interpreted thought for your pet Poofer. I don't know but this piece keeps drawing a smile into my face...lol
very, very nice.
Thanks for sharing your gift.
HENSLEY
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I saw these challenge contests by Hensley and I am not so sure about entering after reading this.
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now that i have my breath back ... thank you ... it is just fine and dandy with me if you don't , lemme tell ya !!!
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oh god that's funni
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poofer, great name, it's what gives life meaning in my opinion, the smallest of friends, this has so much texture to it I;d rather it just stew along inside my brain rubbing off until I'm dazed and searching for ducks in the clouds
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Very sweet and sad. it hurts when the leave the nest, duck or daughter.
I can't help it , but the title reminds me of a bible quote, not that I'm christian..but i am a recovered baptist..somethings just stick, i guess..this is it:
''Cast thy bread upon the waters: for thou shalt find it after many days.''
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was going back looking at comments on some poems and noticed that you got that quote ... very good, you're exactly right, that is exactly the one i used to title the poem ....
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