dont you want her
mouth open, just a little,
wanting it
eyes glazed
dumbstruck with desire,
and when you fuck up
in the outside world,
dont you want her
to whisper
with her
you cannot fail?
A contest entry
- Romance... (ladies only!!) by Angelflower.
1500 points, ended July 30, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is really interesting.. I really liked the flow and imagery here.. Thank you very much for sharing!! best of luck!
Angel
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This is who everyone wants. Perfect write!!!
♥
whisper
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ooh, it's dirty. I like it!
the first thee lines of the second stanza feel a little clunky, a bit wordy perhaps. It loses its flow a little.
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