Horrible decision
I can't do it
But I have to
No I don't
I can keep it
It's a life
But I can't
No money
I'm in school
No support
I told him
He doesn't care
Doesn't give a shit
What do I do?
I can't kill it
I can't murder
It's a baby
I love babies
It's MY baby
I wonder...
A boy or girl?
Stop it
Hmm...names?
Don't
Don't think about it
Don't personalize it
Get rid of it?
How?
My parents
Shit
They'll kill me
I can't tell them
But they'll find out
...Only if I keep it
So I'll abort
Wait, no
I can't do that
I can feel it
The presence
It's there
My friends
Shit
I'm a whore
Should have used protection
Fuck
Tears
Stop it
Be strong
I don't want it gone
I want it
But I can't
They'll notice
Everyone will
Talk of the town
Does it matter?
Did this happen?
I can't believe it
Fucking unlucky
I'm going crazy
I can't decide
No win
Just lose
But gain a child...
Shit
What do I do?
Author notes
Again, this one isn't about me...it's not about anyone. I just seem to be in a baby mood today. But I thought I'd write about the obvious conflict that would go through someone's mind if they were in this situation - which I'm sure a lot of people have been through. Again, more mental conflict...I'm a big fan of it. Tried to capture a lot of emotion with it.
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Thankyou, It is excellent. Yes I know that many have had this converstaion with themselves. Tch, such a shame.
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why??
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emotionally distressing and affirming
wrenchingly beautiful work lime!
you so perfectly illustrated the process of thought when so many conflicting influences, decisions, persons, beliefs and pressures are bearing down on a human being in a position of unfathomable emotional turmoil.
hell yes.
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I like the way you have set this up. You were able to put yourself into the mind of someone actually dealing with such a painful dilemma. I bet you were pretty accurate with the thoughts too. You portrayed the emotions very well. Blessings, Patty
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Beauty...You canptured the decision...a deathly decision that many women are forced make...and like a lot of others...you won't find an answer. Your heart screams out at me through this piece. Simple structure, dragged on through each line...as if the agony is dragging on inside yourself.
"I can't believe it
Fucking unlucky
I'm going crazy
I can't decide
No win
Just lose"
Sad irony in life...for the ones who face this decision...this is a great write...very unique...but it touched me....8.5/10... -
you did capture such a raw emotion in this piece, confusion. I liked it and am certainly happy this isn't personal, i'd feel bad for anyone feeling this way, nice write
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