In May’s sweet kiss of sun, came kiss of fools;
A budding love was soon to follow thence,
Our foolishness- the devils first-hand tools,
Delivering abhorrent consequence.
‘Twas clear that when thou first ‘I love thee’ spoke,
Our hearts were by the strings of time, attached.
And in those words all senses thus awoke,
I knew that unto thee, my heart was latched.
And though I told thee “Nay, take rid of me!”
Why now in blemished heart do I Lament?
For never was I Chaste, or born to be;
Our love was too far breached by sentiment.
And when I said- ‘Kind sir- no more advance…’
You should have saved us whilst you had the chance.
Author notes
Prompt 4- " I hate what you have done to me. You should of stopped when I said stop!"
(To clarify, it is about a woman who did not want to fall in love, but ended up doing so, much to her dislike )
It is a sonnet, but i believe it is much easier to read with separated stanzes .
alicatcloud9
A contest entry
- Random by A-Daisy-Among-Roses.
650 points, ended July 9, 2008, 3 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your favorite Prewrite by SignifyingNothing.
875 points, ended August 9, 2008, 112 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
-
You know, I really like this. It's a great little sonnet, written in an old fashioned style, yet it doesn't seem clumsy or forced in any way. As I said to another person in this contest who wrote a sonnet, I have great respect for poets who can pull off this form, as I have never been able to truly master it. This is truly great, and one of the better poems I have read in a while, thanks so much for entering my contest and letting me read it. And congratulations on the trophy, it was well deserved.
-
I am absolutly in love with this poem. It is beautifull written, the flow, everything is perfect.
" You should have saved us whilst you had the chance. "
This line is a perfect ending to the story you are telling
Adding your comment:
