Shall I be lost in guilt, forever found
in quiet trespass of the hidden night,
when golden tresses tumbled, teasing me
with welcome breasts, which beckoned me to sin?
Soft mornings sigh, as I steal love with my
fake promises, false pledges in the dawn,
with primal urges wrongly acquiesced.
I leave my lover lost in lonely tears,
yet knowing I’ll return when needs arise.
The bedding will continue. I am trapped
in secrets of society’s own hell.
My selfish dreams have insights I detest
to share in my awakened misery.
Such lustful memories are best at rest
in hidden truths, not bared for all to see.
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Picture by poet
A contest entry
- Misunderstood Love by Riftkin.
525 points, ended July 10, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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mmmm this leave me to think really deep... Why is this love misunderstood? I think that woman always see intimacy as something that would tie two people together forever, and the fact that you leave in the morning awakens the feeling of loss... Hope I'm not misinterpreting this....
Very well done! I love the flow of this poem and also the honesty within the lies...
Keep well
Becks
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like the poem and painting very much
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Love that is misunderstood..
no matter how little
causes pain and sadness
Thank you for taking this
to your own place
best of luck
Riftkin
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I love the duende of this poem--the mystery of the unrequited love or "misunderstood" love! It catches the heart and the human condition of "lustful memories" that usually are hidden, in a poem that is both lyrical and filled with emotions.
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THIS IS INTRESTING I UNDERSTAND THIS FROM AN UNREQUENTED POINT OF VEIW, ITS REALLY GOOD MY FRIEND, I CAN'T FAULT THE STYLE, WORD, CHOICE, FLOW ETC... BEST OF LUCK IN THE CONTEST
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Thank you, Uniquely-Scarred...
I was beginning to think that my poem was not liked...from the other comments, so you have lifted me with your comments. I spent a long time on it.
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I too am old.
What matters is that the other person should not mind.
See we all are humans. Love is the greatest thing. Love of any kind as long as your heart accepts it.
Like here your heart says something and your mind something.
For me this would surly be wrong and I would avoid writing such poetry. -
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Thank you, nature
Yes, it is a cruel poem. The contest asked for misunderstanding, and this is what the poem is about. I do stress that it is total fiction. Unfortunately, things like this do happen in real life. Sadly The romantic classics wrote this type of poetry.
I was more concerned with the technicalities of the poetry. I thank you for the comment. I appreciate your thoughts.
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It seems the guilt overshadows the pleasure in this relationship. It made me feel uneasy. If that was the object, your job was well done. Kind of like catching someone red handed and wanting to look away. Good luck.
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thank you, too mysterious.
Yes, there is no 'lovely' pleasure in this poem...but there is pleasure...a misunderstood pleasure. Thank you for your comment.
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