hangover -
the wind rattles
ears of corn
A contest entry
- Haiku Workshop by azure85.
600 points, ended July 24, 60 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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My comment may seem all over the place, but I kept seeing this and that
"morning after" can refer to so many grasps; there is usually a new environment each day from an incident, whatever that may be lol. To me, one of the ways I see it is as a new season, now the fruitage breeze is here. Resonance of "wind" could be the harvesting machine picking them off the plants rapidly. Indian corn, when used as dried decoration correlates also. Too, a storm may have kicked in one day, and then the next there might still be the high gusts, to a few of the crops left that survived.
Or, lastly, the sun is only a larger kernel, and on a hot summer day if it's windy, it sure can sound like it's sort of shaking the warmth down.
I hope I sensed some of quality from this haiku,
Daisy -
I enjoyed this quite a bit! A great 'ku. You have clear imagery; and i love the double meaning of the words; almost sounds like the morning after a night of too much fun
. Great haiku. G'luck!
~Pt
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Oh, the next day (after quite a night) everything hurts and/or everyone is talking-got an ear full.
Like it!
Marlene -
At the public library in Amherst,Nova Scotia, there is an old book titled: "Medieval Latin Students' Drinking Songs".So much music has an affiliation with "the drink", think of "Country 'n Western" or the "Blues",but in poetry is it wrong to think that haiku and rice wine have a rather unique bond in the world of poetry?
I'm just rambling...maybe that is for another contest.
Love your poem: rattling ears of corn! A great image: sad,simple and vivid!
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outstanding.
the first line makes me think of a hangover - everything seems louder when we're in this condition.
on another level it's a closely observed scene by someone who is living completely in the moment.
it's an outstanding example of haiku - evocative, open-ended, beautifully structured and vivid.
best wishes in the contest and in everything you do and write,
myron. -
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Your perception is spot on Myron
My 'ears of corn' caused by corn spirit the night before, heard every blade of grass move.
Alan
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Interesting haiku.
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morning after -
the wind rattles
ears of corn
This is a good haiku-L1 will have you go back to read it many times, because it can hold many meanings. Thank you so much.
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