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Questions as I Walk


I am stuck in a rut
as I walk through this town
all that I can see along my trek
are the dreaded White Houses.
I want to scream.
These house seem so normal
so picturesque, but are they really?
What goes on inside of these
so called perfect places?
Do they fight with one another,
or beat upon there children?
Or do they stare out of a darkened window
hating me as I walk by because
I seem happier then they in there
monotonous existence?
Who's to say what really goes on
inside these overtly ordinary abodes.
It seems that every other home I pass
is some shade of mediocre white.
Be it eggshell, ivory, or blindly white,
they have no originality,
Is this so that they can hide the
horror that lies inside?

 

 

 

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Pic prompt White Houses

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  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 8, 2008

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    Interesting write, very creative. As I ride along in the car, when I look at the scenery and the houses, I think about sorta the same thing.

    Wonderful write.


  • Lucian Valcor
    July 8, 2008

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    lol this is interesting since I do live in a Victorean era white house the classic look you would think of also, the area is pretty quiet for the most part not a lot happens around here but unlike the normal family you see we are more like the ozzborns, we are wiccan and more gothic then you would think by just looking at the house interesting idea I loved the poem

    Lucian"


  • stylization
    July 8, 2008

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    Wow. This is really interesting and really well-written! I love the imagery in this! In the first line, should it be "stuck in a rut?"
    Thanks for entering and best of luck!


    • IrishGypsyRose silver member
      July 8, 2008
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      Thanks

      I appreciate you pointing out the typo or lack of letter...whatever you'd call it. lol. it is fixed and hope for the best thanks again ~mandie~