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Freakshow

Green eyes shimmer
Inside of his lair
Not really a man
So it’s okay to stare
A nameless face, less than dirt
Glad it doesn’t have feelings to hurt

(So you can)
Point
Poke
Mock
The freak inside the cage
No
One
Minds
The freak inside the cage

It doesn’t matter
He has no brains
You pull his strings
But he pulls your chains
Glad to leave this prison of yours
How can you say we never lost course

(But you can)
Point
Poke
Mock
The freak inside the cage
Run
Far
Fear
The freak’s unbottled rage

You know you’re better
A part of the machine
But his cage is yours
No matter how it seems
Don’t break the wall,
Never mind the tears
Just throw some money,
You’ll forget your fears

Better face it
You can’t win
From the freakshow we’re living in…


Author notes

The lyrics to one of my band's songs, but I could use some feedback on it...
It's about society and our behaviour towards others.

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  • DogFish silver member
    July 11, 2008
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    The last line is a real surpise left hook!



  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    July 8, 2008

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    Superb

    Pretty darn good, if you ask me. I rather like them. Thanks for sharing this write with us. hope you have a good evening.