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[ becoming nothing ]

becoming nothing
becoming more
of that which is
what I was before

something foul
I could never like
but only in distrust
could I find
this creep inside
this terrible thing
a must

I can only hope
that I will learn
how to fix what I've done wrong

and I can only wish
that I could save
the ones that i have wronged
the ones that down the evil paths of life
I had led
for so long

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  • Cat10
    July 8, 2008

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    keep it up!! I need to start wirtting more...you have so many more poems than me!


  • atmc
    July 8, 2008
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    that is a scrambling of words there JACKOBY. but you scrambled them just right.