a whole day
turning the earth
old farmer
A contest entry
- Haiku Workshop by azure85.
600 points, ended July 24, 2008, 60 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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bloody amazing!
My grandfather is a farmer; so this hits deep. These 10 syllables leave me pondering so many things..
...I think of my grandfather; of his farm, of the midwest, of hard work, of the vast expanse of fields in South Dakota filled with corn and soy beans, of frailty.. etc.
This 'ku has gold in its veins. Congrats!!!
-sailor ptolema
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Glad you got so much out of it S-P
Funny little things, haiku
- thank you very much for your kind comments.
Regards
Alan (Tishu) -
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You're welcome!
Yes, they are I take severe offense to anyone who says they are void of depth. lol.
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congrats!
Congratulations Alan on your well-deserved gold trophy! Excellent haiku and excellent choice by the judge. -
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GOLD!!
Thanks Myron and congrats yerself for getting two in the frame
Alan
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I like it I get a mental picture from this piece which can be tough to do in so few words. Good luck in the contest and I really look forward to reading more of your work!
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Perfection.
Ponder-able possible alternate meanings in you deceptively simple haiku. The penultimate line "turning the earth" is subtle and brilliant. One of the best Haiku I've ever read. I can't think of a more apt title. Return the favor?
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Ahhh...would like to meet this old farmer. Lotsa questions to ask!No, seriously, this is superb, spiritual and sublime haiku.
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Great haiku!
My 11 year old son and I sat and pondered this.
We discussed the earth turning while the farmer turns the earth. Great images. Good luck in the contest.
qt
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Very cool, linking the revolution of the earth (that's got to be heavy) and the farmer tilling the soil. Sigh, how it ages you.
Marlene -
I agree with the others:
this is simple but clever,
very down to earth and easy to enjoy!
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a whole day
turning the earth
old farmer
A very good haiku, the images and thoughts are so clear. A snapshot of time, and the eternal work of the farmer and more within your haiku. Thank you so much.
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I like this - reminds me of Basho - so it must be good!
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oh yes ... wonderful ....
i got the whole celestial thing happening first and got the aha with the third line .... and yet still the earth turning in a day ...
lovely work Alan >>> Gina -
exquisite
Aha...what a wonderful final image to this exquisite haiku. Simple, yet resonant, ordinary yet extraordinary because of the context. The second line does a lot of hard work as a pivot.
Best wishes in the contest, and on your continual haiku path,
Myron.
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