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Obtrusive Supremacy




Baleful oculus,
spawning many tribal tears,
within lilac dreams. 




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But make sure its under 30 WORDS

Your prompt is Purple Eyes
(The picture can be used too)

Haiku

A contest entry

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  • Luciferschild
    February 11

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    very very good haiku, this was exactly why i started to contest. thank you for entering and good luck in the contest


  • sailor ptolema
    July 8, 2008

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    OH! OH !!! Your word choices here are FABULOUS my dear!!


    "Baleful">>>>OH MY!!!!! I'm dancing a jig over here I like that word so much Seriously. This is such a fascinating write!!!!! Congrats on silver!!!!


    S. P. ~


  • Age of Rain
    July 8, 2008

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    'Baleful oculus' Okay, so that gave me shivers. And such an unusual word choice for eye. Two thumbs WAY up! This Haiku was quite good, and brought the prompt to an unusual place. Well done!


  • Riftkin gold member
    July 8, 2008
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    An Haiku
    to show pure beauty
    wonderfully done


  • Dmonik
    July 8, 2008

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    Damn, only three lines, but with an encyclopaedia of Vision.
    For something so short, this is hard hitting and wonderful.
    Bravo Vik!

    'D'

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