Time
Relentless as the tide
Carries on its current
this Poseidon heart
which knows no end of passion
the stinging salt
a brine which covers all
Heart
Soul
Life
Love
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Very interesting, I like 'the stinging salt/ a brine which covers all', that's a great line and I certainly understand this well!
thank you for entering
-cassidy -
Within the sting of salt ...
lies the recollection of the sweet of soft.
Do not care about hardship in love. It brings purpose to the focusedness.
Blessed be.
Myra
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Oh yes, I can relate to this... time is reletentless and the heart can surely be stung... excellent imagery!
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Beautiful! Simply a excellent take on the prompt!
Well done and good luck... -
Poseidon!! Oh, fabulous reference & title..
"Relentless as the tide"
Felt this line...the tide just...never seems to stop, and it works in your context as well as for the prompt.
"the stinging salt"
Salt does sting, oh my God!! Or well, it can...but it's a great remedy for canker sores when mixed with water...anyways, good luck
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