Long sleep of waters
--altered--
when you leaped into me,
out of me
. . . river dance
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15 words
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A contest entry
- just how creative are you # 2 by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended July 8, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Still Skipping Stones
whoa this is awesome!!! a gold trophy well deserved!!! keep up the great work!
your friend,
-slick
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brevity, the soul of wit, but this dance... lingers...PK
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this is gorgeous, so gold worthy...I love
"long sleep of waters"
such a sensual feel to this, very well done!..
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Wow, incredible description, fully developed and wonderfully romantic personification, in only 15 words. This is fabulous, congratulations on the gold!
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This is well done.
Thank you for the inspiration...I have always enjoyed stones that skip across water.
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this is really really good Glad you got the gold. Love, Lane
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Great description of skipping stones as "river dance!" Lovely personification, delightful "leaped into me, out of me." Stirs sweet old memories. Well done!
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Yeah.
Cold water, right?
Slick metaphor.
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wow ~ love this completely... x
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Certainly a creative piece - who knows where prompts take one? Jason cerainly took you to unique places.
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Oh I love this!!!
The ending made me sigh
Just so amazing in so few words
You creative lady
Lynda
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Very cool. I won't read the prompt I like to be in the dark. Except when it's actually DARK. Curiosity is the only thing that makes the unknown not terrifying to me.
Skipping stones... definitely a great recreational activity for me. I like this, hopping- quick
succinct.
Smarty pants XD
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Beautiful hun, I loved it Hugs, Bunny
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