thoughtless becomes this
mind when I'm alone
true I would breath right
when I see your glow
So be that which moves me
which brings me from my low
I only hope to be the one
who makes you breath right too
who takes you to a higher place
the one who pulls you though
pulls you though the days
when nothings ever right
when it seems that the brightest days
are filled with all but light
I just hope I can be that guy
I hope that i just might
A contest entry
- enter poetry here. by And Hyetal.
300 points, ended July 31, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think in general? Improvements?
Comments
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i love this poem jake. great job on this one. we need to start putting together those poems for the book we were talking about.
ATM... -
one again, great!
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