Gold wings
flutter, tasting
granules of tiny seed.
Pointed beaks sifting endlessly.
Soft chirps
bursting upon delicate breeze
announcing morning sun
to all who sleep.
Day break
Author notes
This is a butterfly cinquain poem of nine lines, containing syllable counts of 2,4,6,8,2,8,6,4,2
In a list
A contest entry
- Nature ,Short Form Only Contest by HopelessScribbles.
625 points, ended July 10, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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How beautiful, both sight and sound, I am sure to be more intent on listening on a morning now,
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Thank you for reading and commenting on this poem, I appreciate it greatly!!!!!
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Beautiful form and subject congratulations on gold
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate it!!
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Worthy of the Gold
One would
wonder if the
gold would be awarded
to a work titled Red Robin
Good choice
A pleasant way to awaken
Tis truly much nicer
than alarm clocks
GET UP!
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Thanks for reading and commenting Bob.
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excellent~
Beautiful and congrats on the gold trophy
Well deserved...I entered this one too and got honorable mention...
Hope you come visit me as well
Nice to meet you as well
Hugs
Susan~~~
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Thank you Susan for reading and commenting. I appreciate it.
Hugs in return,
Charley
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Beautiful
This is a wonderful and beautiful poem. You can see the Finch, sitting atop a branch outside your window, chirping and singing bringing in the day. wonderfully written, great form and amazing imagery!
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Thank you for reading and commenting, I appreciate it very much!!!!
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very lovely
i enjoyed the visions of the little birdies and to listen to their chirps are special as they feed
thank you for this entry, good luck
Lin
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Thank you very much for the Gold!!!! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this write. I appreciate it greatly.
Thanks again,
Charley
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Beautiful write, Charley. Wonderful poetic form. Beautiful imagery in this and I like the description of sound of the chirps. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you Haley for reading and commenting, it is always appreciated.
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