grass blowing in wind
lawn mower sits in garage
husband's not at home
Author notes
grannyeri
Summer means cutting the lawn - a man's job, when he's home.
photo from deviantART
A contest entry
- Haiku Contest --- for 'Visions through Haiku' Members only. (Application link inside) by Harrisham Minhas.
475 points, ended July 28, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Liked it! I never cut my grass at all, little man comes to do it for us. This paints a vivid and evocative image with a nice touch of humour at the end. Cheers, thanks for sharing and congrats on the silver, well deserved.
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Sounds like my step dad. Sits there and doesn't do anything in the summer except for drink. Pfft
I like your take on the prompt; very clever
Claire x -
This just hammers home the reality for me that since my husbands left leg amputation last july that I will be mowing tha lawn for the rest of my life. Another cross to bear in this love we call marriage. For better and for worse right? Really this brought a chuckle to me,nice take on the theme. Warmly chrissy
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Ha Ha! I like the imagery and can relate to the job designations that you have spoken of. I like that first line: grass blowing in wind. Well Done!
Dennis
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Ha Ha! I like the imagery and can relate to the job designations that you have spoken of. I like that first line: grass blowing in wind. Well Done!
Dennis
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Very clever take on mowing my grass.
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I really like the contemporary feel of this poem
I tend to agree with you that it is a man's job (especially since I live in a house on a hill ) and I really like the desolate nature of this poem - because it leaves it open that he will be coming home - wonderfully done - good luck in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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Yes, very clever. Reminds me, I should get the Flymo out soon.
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i really like this,
it reminded me of my
daddy cause he always
is doing the lawn
i meant mowing the lawn.
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Thank you for your Haiku:
grass blowing in wind
lawn mower sits in garage
husband's not at home
This is so vivid and goes very well with the theme of this contest.
It is a splendid Haiku.
An enjoyable read.
Thanks again.
Harrisham Minhas
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I like your summer take..the haiku is beautifully done..All the best in the contest!
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So I cut my own grass or pay someone to do it. Of course leaving where I live, I already pay someone to cut my grass.
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ha! very cute! made me smile.
you take care.
warmest of love and hugs,
Mylee
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Haha, great haiku, I like the subtle ending you have given this write. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.
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