It's amazing how you make me feel
when you're around;
all you have to do is smile,
and I'm yours.
I get butterflies in my stomach,
There is a ringing in my ears,
and the room starts to spin.
It's unbearable to live with,
but also unbearable to live without.
I love the way your eyes sparkle,
I love the way your voice sounds,
I love the way your hair feels,
I love the way you laugh,
but most of all,
I love the way you make me love you.
I love everything about you,
even your faults.
But the one thing I hate about you,
is the way you don't love me in return.
Author notes
option 4. diary entry from jacob
Missa
A contest entry
- anything & prewites by whos my humblepie.
600 points, ended July 20, 2008, 39 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prompts & more prompts. by TChaplinette.
450 points, ended August 15, 2008, 28 entries
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Comments
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I agree with redneckluver...remindes me of 10 things i hate about you as well.
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Thank you for your heartfelt entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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AWE! Poor jacob! This might just be one of my favorites simply for the sheer fact that it also reminds me of the movie "10 things I hate about you" which is my favorite movie! ^_^ Good job
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I can so relate to this. I mean to say, from being a girl in the same position, not the guy. Really deep and sad.
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okay now this is something special i loved how you ended it especially, and i think one of the reasons i love jacob somuch is because i can relate to him soomuch i know how it feels to love someone who doesnt love you back, so you could say i have a more 'personal' connection with jacob even tho he's a fictional character!...lol so yeah i love how you showed how much he loves bella yet you also showed the hurt of nor being loves in return which explains the saying "The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return" lol guess it isnt so great when your not loves in return! and you showed that well in this peice!!
Thanks for entering and GOOD LUCK!!
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A really nice poem dictating a one sided love affair. I can kinda see how this relates to the twilight saga.. Jacob and Edward being torn between Bella.. Thanks for sharing, and congrats on all of your winnings.
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thanks!
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i love this poem because i can really relate to it. im sure anyone can relate to it, but it is still very good. and i love it. it really reminds me of myself quite a bit.
I get butterflies in my stomach,
There is a ringing in my ears,
and the room starts to spin.
It's unbearable to live with,
but also unbearable to live without.
this was the best part of the poem i think. it was deep and again, i know the feeling very well. lol. good job!
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This is good, but I found the amout of repeating words very distracting. Shame, very good theme and emotion within, good luck
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AWW! this is such a beautiful write! it was so lovely in the beginning, and ended with such a melancholy touch!
great way to weave your emotions into words! amazing flow and all, so keep penning! 
~beauty of silence
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Awe this was a great poem!! Thank you for entering!!
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holy shit!!! that was poweful enough, but the ending nearly gave me a freaking heartattack...very, VERY good work...
and, did you notice, it's (the forming of the words) in the shape of an old-timey lantern...cool
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hmmm. I don't really feel very much emotion in this. I don't think it's quite right for my contest but it's a decent write
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i loved this!
it reminds me of some of the "i love you, but you don't love me" poetry that i write. alo. lol.
thank you so much for entering.
and good luck.
♥taylor.
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I never expected this to be an unrequited love poem. It was so sweet and heartfelt I though it had to be about true love. I enjoyed the repetition. Thanks for entering and good luck
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Wow I really liked this!!
MY favorite lines are
ll you have to do is smile,
and I'm yours.
I get butterflies in my stomach,
There is a ringing sound in my ears,
and the room starts to spin.
It's unbearable to live with,
but also unbearable to live without.
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The poem was pleasant enough to read, but could you remove sound from this line:"I hear a ringing sound in my ears,"
You don't need it there as hearing means there is a sound.
I did enjoy this poem.
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Very good write here
Very dood de[pth and feelings and the very embrace often we all feel yet the one we love will never experience for they never saw what was truly before them
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awww i really like. it makes me want to write a jacob poem now... i think i probably will. i still though havent chosen a side, i luv both edward and jacob. *sigh*
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Very nice it is too for the teens but I was asking what makes you tick not a fictional character.
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NOOOO!!
Jacob is my favorite werewolf!!
Dont go edward!
hes so... non-cool.
LOL well good poem tho..
I likee!
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I really like this poem and I think a lot of people can relate to it... keep penning
♥always Kay
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