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Fast Train To Hell

She cries. No one is watching,
and she screams silently;
praying for something,
anything
to hang on to.


She asks where the truth is
but she knows it has left:
took a fast train to hell,
left with nary a wit.


Where do we stand when
no one cries foul,
and those left behind
stand confused and alone.


There is an answer and
so she waits,
for signs that His coming
is not far away.


But in the night,
she holds her heart tight,
knowing that only a few
will receive the love
this world needs

to survive.

(c) Debby Sorensen Carlson
    July 7, 2008




















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  • Debbysmiles gold member
    July 23, 2008
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    Thank you darryl. I like contests that make me think.. God bless. Debby


  • tainfinite
    July 8, 2008
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    taiinfinite

    so good; reminded me of the dylan song slow train coming for some reason, good luck in comp


  • Nicada silver member
    July 7, 2008

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    This is sadly beautiful and you have done a great job relating to the prompt quote. So much emotion runs through this, and it delivers a powerful message. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Patty

  • darrylblacksr
    July 7, 2008

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    The last stanza really made a difference to me:

    But in the night,
    she holds her heart tight,
    knowing that only a few
    will give the love
    this world needs.
    Thank you for such beautiful entry and good luck in the contest...


    • Debbysmiles gold member
      July 8, 2008
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      darryl

      I edited a few things darryl. If that is not ok.. you can remove me. Blessings. d


    • Debbysmiles gold member
      July 7, 2008
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      Thank you darryl.. and good wishes to all.. d

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