The silence of serenity and the echoing sound it makes,
across distances so lovely, vast empty landscapes.
A sound that carries a caress of wind and dust in its taste,
singing a portrait of sun and clouds the lands dappled face.
A mellow mood and a memory's pleasant face.
The silence of the mind and the echoing sound it makes.
Across distances so lonely dispite bleak landscapes,
comes the singing spirit of a loved ones gentle embrace.
Author notes
When we are far from our loved ones.
Written when I lived near Spokane Wa.
Go here to hear it with sound
http://www.charlesallenjohnson.com/moods.htm
Written January 5th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Summer Time Nature ~ short under 15 lines ~ by misticmoonlite.
600 points, ended June 29, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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very nice work capturing the sense of locale and the mood. i often find myself drawn to such scenes. well done.
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A form of triolet or villanelle? hmm...will search it shadowpoetry. Very nice effective with rep's. Paint me serenity and flowers . very well -written
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It's interesting how you play with repetition in this poem, with both stanzas ending in the same words in all but one line ... and how you repeat certain elements in the poem, yet the repetition is not tiresome or detrimental. This is a very serene piece, and works well with the image you have used to illustrate it.
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Simply beautiful and congratulations to you on your gold trophy here! I enjoyed reading it and love the imagery in your words as well as the picture. Thank you for taking the time to write for my contest and good luck to you with it here!
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The picture added to the poem. But this was what I was looking for. Even without the picture it would paint that moment into my life. Very beautifully penned, good use of imagery.
Rose -
Awesomely crafted. I love the pic too.
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Thanks bro!
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I really loved this poem. short and sweet. Full of serenity and tranquility. Well done. Thank you for your entry and best of luck to you!
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Mr. Johnson,
I do find these words apt and appropiate to the task. More so, I found the link to the media presentation equally powerful.
I do appreciate your willingness to share.
Best of Luck
Niaish
Silent Hawk
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I like how the piece is able to depict the distance between those we care about in a physical plane, as well as how there can be no such gulf mentally. Especially dug the silence vs. echo illusion in the second stanza. Interesting repetition with the ends of the lines, as well. Very solid piece, and thanks for the entry.
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Congratulations on the gold, a beautiful poem. I listened to the sound, re-read and closed my eyes, it's a very unique experience...thank you.
Sue
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Thank you, Sue. Nice of you.
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this is an excellent piece,even without the sound
effect, thank you for this entry and good luck in this contest..
Linda
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So often I've found that appreciation in simple words is enough reward in itself. Thus, I return your points and pray you will use them again to honor another aspiring poet in the quest for the perfect nature poem. Thank you for the honor MoonsShadow
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Oh I love this is is beautiful and gave me a peace and serenity very nice piece indeed thank you for your entry into my contest much love always
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Beautiful imagery and lovely words paint a great picture. Good luck!
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wonderful poetry - eharmony -gundo04@netzero.net
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the silence of serenity, says it all for me....
a golden beauty!
Tamara
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great job! i enjoyed reading this- short and sweet. this poem flowed very nicely, and the rhyming was good also. It created a nice pic for me... thanx for sharing
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so soft and gentle and that picture ties in so well with the serene longing expressed within it. usually i steer clear of rhyming poems, but your imagery and detail exceeds beyond rhyme and still carries meaning within the lines instead of fitting some set form that it makes it all the more enjoyable to read. wonderfully written. keep it up
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what a great piece! this whole poem flowed very well, and the rhyme was wonderful. i loved the vivid imagery, and the feelings it evoked in me while reading. great work <33
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A stunning work! You have made these lines flow very well and your useof rhyme is fabulous as well. I love nature poems of all sorts and thisis a wonderfully refreshing write! Best of wishes... ~genielassie~
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very good
Superb writing, Chuck. I love nature poems, especially the short ones that are so full of meaning and imagery. This one did not let me down.
Best wishes,
Moses -
So close yet so far away
Words of love make my day
Hearing the syllables pass the lips
Feeling the warmth from a gentle kiss
Knowing that special person is out there
Showing that same person how much you care
~Loved ones are priceless gems~Awesome piece my dear and welcome to AP~Have much fun and enjoyed this write very much~Thank you for gracing my page~Keep on writing and inspiring~Big hugs
and much love~Desire
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Thanks for all your wonderful comments. I'm not deserving.
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Lovely piece of art. Very upbeat and almost surreal... thanks for sharing it!~
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Excellent
This one paints a million possible images in my mnd, the imagery used in descriptions is vivid, truly magical and creative indeed.
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Excellent verse! I totally enjoyed the way you used your words to keep the magic of the piece intact. I hope to read a lot more of your writings.
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Exellent!
Chuck,
This is a very well done poem. I really enjoyed reading it even though it is short but that is what you intended, I'm sure. Your words make your poem flow so well. Very beautiful.
Smiles always,
Kristina
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Short and beautiful, these lines remind me of Canada when I was there last year... wide open spaces, smell of the pines The silence of serenity and the echoing sound it makes,
across distances so lovely, vast empty landscapes. also what you say here A mellow mood and a memories pleasant face.
The silence of the mind and the echoing sound it makes.
the silence of the mind... that's something that I treasure, the quiet of the mind when surrounded by so much of nature's beauty, yet it makes the heart shout out in joy... another good write... well done!!! ~~wishintreeUK~~ (Katie)
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it might be a short poem but i can almost live in it its written beautifully with such grace and talent ... well done .
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