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No Compromise

child of the night
don't you cry
tears attract monsters
keep them inside

all that you crave, all that you know
all that you reap from all that you sow
the world at your feet, magic in your eyes
the future is yours
no compromise

sweet heart's prize
don't you sigh
exhale quiet hope
keep it alive

all that you feel, all you believe
all that you sense from what you perceive
the world at your call, growth in your tries
the future is yours
no compromise

dearest one
don't you die
put up your shield
fight to survive

all that you love, all you hold dear
all that you are and all that you fear
the world at your fingers, no surprise
the future is yours
no compromise

Author notes

Elizabeth Darkwell - I once had a English teacher tell me that the red pen was invented for my writing and even though he liked my story he failed me for too many grammer mistakes and for this poem my inspiration is about not compromising your passions and strengths for weaknesses in life and to fight for what you believe in even if other people try to discourage you. and that works in all parts of life too not just english class

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  • Amera gold member
    March 27

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    I found this to be a captivating read as it seems to instill an adult to child wisdom, a wisdom that will stick with the child throughout life. Good luck in this contest.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    March 9
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    Oh this is good.

    Nice shapes too. heh


  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    February 1

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    awesome write. i can see why it won gold and silver trophies. i enjoyed reading it and thanks for sharing. good luck.


  • Serenity-words
    February 1
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    Great!!

    I thought this was a wonderful poem. Good Job, I enjoyed reading it!


  • AutumnsFlame
    October 9, 2008

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    Okay, so I thought this really could use some grammar. There are supposed to be capital letters at the beginning of sentances and commas and periods help the reader know where to pause. Overall, I found this to be very teen-angsty, and I don't think this made the cut for my contest. Thank you for entering.


  • MrsJones
    September 15, 2008

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    No it's not specific to any one thing but it doesn't deserve to be dq'd. You did a fabulous job on it, and it does express a lof of passion to make changes in ones life. You did great, thanks for entering.


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    August 28, 2008
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    This is a beautiful flowing piece, it has such a uplifting tone to it, well done and best to you


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    August 25, 2008

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    your rhyme in thiss poem is flawless and i love this
    it speaks true hope in the darkness! i love it
    all my love thanks for entering
    -kitty xxx


  • owlish
    August 12, 2008

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    Thank you. It's a very hopeful, beautiful poem. Thanks for your entry. I'll try to listen to the advice given throughout the poem. It's a wonderful piece. I can really relate to it.

  • WithoutWings
    July 25, 2008

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    Very nice. Fight for yourself and what you want, don't compromise, you can do it. The words quietly inspirational popped into my head after I read this. Thanks for entering my contest and giving me some hope.


  • kareneisenlord gold member
    July 25, 2008

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    Very nice! It is interlaced with hope and inspiration; like a beautiful lullabye to sing to a child. I didn't understand the "fight the butterflies", but I was thinking you were referring to the feeling of butterflies in the stomach when one is afraid or anxious. All of it was beautifully written and I loved the chorus with the slight varying of it in the last stanza. Very nice, and deserving of the gold trophy!


  • CassidyEngle
    July 24, 2008
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    Well done!
    Very amazing
    Great use of words


  • Raven Tears gold member
    July 22, 2008

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    This was amazing well done!
    Sorry I took forever in reading it by the way.
    Nothing was forced and it just flowed so freely off the page, better still it was a strong, detailed and wonderful write to read.
    Kudos to you!


  • PerfectImperfection
    July 22, 2008

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    Wow!! This is awesome! The thoughts within are pure, empathetic - and encouraging. I especially enjoyed these lines:

    "all that you crave, all that you know
    all that you reap from all that you sow"

    "all that you love, all you hold dear
    all that you are and all that you fear"

    .. that is so well spoken, and wonderfully deep ..

    "the future is yours
    no compromise"

    The repetition of the ending, fits so well for flow. Great write!


  • BornWithAPen
    July 21, 2008

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    Stunning

    I would have to say, and in total honesty this is the best flow i have ever had the privelage to read, not once did it stop, from start to end it was so easy to read, your syllable count was perfect, the poem made a lot of sense, just an absolute joy to read, this is now my favourite piece on AP, even above my own stuff.
    Michael


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    July 20, 2008
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    amazing rhyme scheme and flow. wonderful poem.

  • wendymolly
    July 17, 2008

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    nearly flawless in rhyme and meter in my humbled opinion. Love the overall thoughts that you have woven so well! your a finalist in the contest! Good Luck!
    take care always and God Bless! ~pithyAplomB.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    July 16, 2008

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    Excellent write here

    Yes indeed in our society today I feel the children in growing up never had to be alone they were shuffled here and their constantly with sitters and friends and when they get old enough to care for themselves as some parents think then they are left to more or less fend for themselves. They become lost and afraid of the silence around them and thei minds do wander . Help the young know you must always see yourself as your very best friend for who knows you better yet often the young falls into depression for the only dwell on the loneliness and stop getting out to meet new people and friends that would help see that they are happy and loved .I the friends you have about you keeps you down abd feeling sad its time you reach beyond them and find the happiness you so seak


  • DeGraw
    July 15, 2008

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    Fabulous!

    A piece of artwork from the words to the rhyme to the sheer look of it! Perfect!
    Regards,
    DeGraw


  • La Tua Cantante
    July 9, 2008

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    I love this. My favorite part is:
    "dear one
    don't you die
    put up your shield
    fight to survive"

    This is a really good write.


  • Poetic Obscenity
    July 7, 2008

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    I agree with the comment below mine. This is an amazing piece with wonderful flow. The rhyming made the whole thing much better. I severely enjoyed this. =]

    <3 ya.


  • SaviDropKick.Oi.
    July 7, 2008
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    aww great job hun!!!!
    i love it!!!!
    keep it up hun!!!!
    Love,
    Savi

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