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Antipasto, Aleut

  I am a shivering pencil
    my box is made of blue card board

  like a scimitar I am
  buried in the mud flats

        as rusty and as dull as a
          mildly retarded
          asparagus stem

  in the green dawn of unwed jungles
        I stalk like a nude game warden

            into the bedroom
          of the sleeping ape
      hushed asleep by
          the incessant pounding of
            the distant artillery

      I am, still, that shivering pencil
            shoved rudely

        where the sun
          don’t shine

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  • LAPoe silver member
    July 8

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    "shoved rudely, where the sun don't shine?" hum? I bet you have a nice sharp point then!
    Perfection my friend, utter silly perfection!

    laurie


  • Melodies silver member
    July 7

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    hehe but the last four lines make me all squirmy! Still, I am laughing and hugging you, you scoundrel!


  • Times Change
    July 7
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    hahaha yet another funny poem!
    Good work! =]