Night is friendly
Night is mean
Night is something
That cannot be seen.
To us it's dark,
To some it's light;
Their night is day
And day is night.
The night can hide
Or make things known,
The night can scare
Small things alone.
The night is when
The sun must sleep
And glowing eyes
Begin to peep.
The night is here
But it won't stay,
For God will change
The night to day.
Author notes
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Comments
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The last stanza is brilliant. I love the flow and the rhyme you have weaved into this beauty.
Good luck in the contest.
♥
Dax
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nice job, the first stanza was my personal favorite
good luck in the contest
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Cleaver!
This is a very fun read. Good flow and rhyme and a nice little twist at the end. Howard
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Love this stanza especially. To me this stanza took the simple idea you were working with and made them profound. Nice write and best of luck in the contest.
The night is here
But it won't stay,
For God will change
The night to day.
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PianoMan
very good i say,
PianoMan did a good job today!
-slick99
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Hmmm. Didn't really like the overuse of night. Still, this had a good enough flow. Best of luck!
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Woah. You somehow read my mind, and figured out what I would really like. This is a beautiful poem, and you had great rythm, rhyme, everything. I absolutely love this!
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Not bad ...
but it's rather simplistic.
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I'm not usually a fan of rhyming poems, but I'm so glad that yours wasn't over-the-top. So many rhymers come off as sounding forced and cheesy, but not you... And even though I don't have a religion at the moment, I admire and respect your belief that your God will pull you through the darkest of times. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
Laura x
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omg.. this poem is so good! I love it. The contrast is great! I like the flow of it, well done
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Great flow of rhyme in this imaginative poem; the use of calling night dark and to some light is interesting and thought provoking for me
Excellent poem
Best of luck
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OOOH very nicely written, and the background with the all the dark colors goes nicely with it. You have found your own style that is only you hun and I am pround of you. But this piece is very good and I like it very much. Even though I am one of those glowing eyes of which you speak. The night is my day as you would say. Hey look I rhymed too. Great job keep it up. You are developing a great style.
Always write from the heart
Never give up
Kate
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