Now I will tell you what i've done because of you
Millions of tears I've cried
All the nights I've lied awake
Trying so hard not to think of you
Seeing you in the halls doesn't help
I'v always wondered if you were thinking about me
Like I thought about you
If you were water
I would be drowning
Falling forever and ever
I've got to break through
All the spinning truth and lies
Now I don't know whats real and whats not
While your always confusing my thoughts
So I don't know if I can trust you
You don't know how you've betrayed me,in so many ways
And somehow you've got everybody fooled
I know the truth now
I know what you are doing
And I don't love you anymore
You've broken me
So go on and try to hurt me again
I know the truth
I won't be broken by you again.....
Author notes
Please read this poem and tell the truth of what you think about me.
Did you think it has good rythmn?
Comments
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I guess it goes to show, no matter how old you are, when you lose someone you love, the heartache is still the same.
I like this as it expresses your true feelings, you don't hold back. I also like the comparisons like "If you were water, I would be drowning" that's such a great line. Good job!!
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You have some good things happening here - I love the lines 'If you were water I would be drowning'. Some typos that need fixing, otherwise a strong statement of feeling.
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