my kind
doesn't come in pairs
yet mysteriously
I do have predecessors
heirs
I cling to no one
mortal or divine
even those I love
including myself
some traces of regret still linger
but only to remind me of my humanity
solitude is my permanent home
only this moment is real
and
lasts forever
from time to time i succumb
to loneliness
despairing separation from the common way
but soon a heightened sense of danger
awakens me from isolation to celebrate refreshed
the sweet affirmation of individuality
I imagine you in countless ways
more precisely
I see you eveywhere just as you are
taking notice of our small similarities
but focused mainly on our glaring differences
you sleep walk through the hours
oblivious to the miraculous events of ordinary life
but I don't dwell on that much anymore
no time for distractions
I must go now
silence summons me
Please tell me what you think
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Very thought provoking.
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I love the flow of this poem. I read it slowly...because it had that kind of cadence to it. (That is a compliment by the way
) It is pensive and written in such a way that I think everybody might think...'Ah this seems like it was written for me'. Bravo!
Mariana
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I like the tension of opposites explored here, and the call of silence.
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This is interesting...just vague enough to keep my interest but not so much that I'm completely confused. However, it does come off as a bit run-on-sentence-ish, and some of the formatting threw me off a bit. For instance, I don't think "and" should have its own line in that context; it just chops up the idea needlessly. I also think you should be careful with capitalization and punctuation; yes, this is poetry, but you can use these elements in your favor in order to better convey where clauses and thoughts begin and end. Consider these; it will be great!
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Outstanding
I liked how you explored your emotions in this poem enjoying some time in solitude and expressing your feelings. I repect the honesty of your poetry you keep it real. A great poem.
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I like this...and I love the silences, the being me...you have captured my life as well as your own...thank you.
Sue
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Wow I love this..I love those moments of silence as well..it is where I find my real self..this is touched me deeply..and your ending is stunning..excellent piece of work
Ruby
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i like this, i like to be alone as well, thank you for the comment on my poem
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"I must go now
silence summons me"
A kindred spirit. I'll be back to read more.
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Hello.
An insightful write. Certainly has shades of far eastern philosophy; existing in the only moment that is real, the now. The detachment from all including the fake you (Flesh/Ego), as well as the slumbered state of mankind, fused into groups devoid of sovereignty. And the silence, where you find and lose yourself. Well that is what I got from it. Great write, stylish.
My regards.
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The ending is poignant...much like a half-smoked cigarette forgotten in the darkness.
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I feel myself in this.. its wonderful!I will be reading more
_Sarahlynn -
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Bravo!
This is so rich.
I feel a different pacing here, an up and down, a briskness here and a slowness there.
I can hear you reading this.
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