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paradise


a blank page can tell no stories of
tomorrow's pride and can fill the need
to dream

creation becomes endless when staring
at the empty lines of liberty's pursuit

no longer overcome with revenge, I dream
of revolving pictures and a paradise of
only words

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prompt: a blank page

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  • pania gold member
    July 21

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    Thank you for this entry in the contest.

    'a paradise of only words' made me think. How words can describe a paradise, or create one. But your words, of pride, dreams, liberty and revenge make me see one who has been denied paradise.

    The image of revolving pictures is intriguing, too. I'm not sure I fully understand this poem, but I'm left with an image of recovery - from love, or a fever, or a dream, it doen't matter which. Very nice work.

  • jovi
    July 7
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    very good my friend. good luck!