i trace this photo i have of you
held within pale, trembling hands
my finger gentle caresses your face
the one imprinted on my heart
i could have forgiven many things
excepted the excuses that you gave
forgotten all the hurt it caused
said yes and then let you stay
my heart it hurts and aches for you
my tears they wont let up
but cheating cant be fixed with words
no sorry can take it back
don't call me up i wont be there
this time i'm not gonna cave
you did me wrong and now its done
now its my turn to hurt you
Author notes
option 7#
A contest entry
- Options !! [PW ALLOWED!] by innocence jaded.xx.
625 points, ended July 13, 2008, 47 entries
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Comments
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Whoaaa. This is insanely good. Thank you for entering a new write; it was great that you took the time to come up with something so beautiful and vivid. I love the raw emotion in this one, too; it was so full of shame. The only thing I recommend changing is in the first line: change "traces" to "trace" & then on the third line: change "caress" to "caresses" AND, haha, on the first line of the second stanza change "forgive" to "forgiven." This poem is amazinggg. I loved it. Thank you so much for entering & best of luck to you !
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