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Second Time Around


Oh father,

why cast thee to the shadows,
why torment thee once more?
Does not mankind's blood run thick enough

without more holy wars...

 

My message will go unanswered,

only serpents eyes will see.

That I lay my life down once again,

for all humanity...

 

Oh father,

whisper sweetly, inside my wanting ears.

Just give me strength inside my heart,

to be sacrificed again.

 

The mocking birds are waiting,

waiting in their droves.

Two thousand years have past again,

they have shadows in their clothes...

 

Oh father,

please don't tell me, I know the only truth.

My first demise, I will then rise,

and return them all to you... 

 

The battlefields are singing,

a song you only know.

This truth again that I defend

will cast the heavens stones... 

 

Oh father,

please forgive them,

for they know, not what they do.

I showed them love, from heaven above,

but they send me back you... 

 

 

 

 

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  • Talking Toni gold member
    July 7, 2008

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    Very Good............

    With the exception of a few spelling errors this was really good.In stanza four you use "there" twice when it shoul be "their" and in stanza six the second line you write "No" and it shoul be "know". But the message detailed within was good enough where the spelling didn't matter much. Thanks for your entry and the best of luck in my contest!!!~~Toni~~


    • Timespell
      July 7, 2008
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      Thanks Toni...

      I was intrigued by the actual picture for your contest, so I put this down in free verse. So that's why the mistakes show up. I will edit, thanks for pointing them out.

      All the best

      ~T.S~