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Past Their Limits.

Inspiration, I beg you.
Strike me now and a masterpiece
could be formed from my fingertips
that guide this ever anxious pencil.
The paper spread before it like a face,
waiting for expression.
Come to me....
Make these lips draw into a smile,
make these eyes see past their limits.
Make these hands create such words,
that these minds see past their limits.

Author notes

Um....so I just was randomly typing and this came to me....
I don't know if it's all that great...
but it seemed alright
and I was curious on what other people
might think of it,
so I decided to post it here for some feedback.
Honest opinions please.
You don't have to be mean about it,
but if it actually sucks,
please let me know.
=P

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  • maktub
    October 2, 2008

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    Actually...it's pretty good. you painted the image before the eye's of the reader as the words unfold.

    There was, I think, a typo in line 5....you may want to add an 's' to 'spread'.

    Enjoyed it!


    • Academy
      October 2, 2008

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      I don't see a typo,
      the "s" is there on my screen.

      Maybe I'm crazy, haha.

      Thank you so much for all the reviews,
      I've been starved for some feedback on the God-forsaken website!