My Trembling fingers caress a damaged body
as chromatic eyes look into blurred irises.
Annihilated dreams defend the syringe
and the glitter and glamour you once observed
is begining to disolve.
[Just like your veins;
But this is what you wanted... Right?]
Do you remember when I came to you,
broken and absurdly incoherant?
My eyes were glassy
and my breathing was forced.
You saw me, you held me,
and you tried to make it all better.
You embraced my tracks like a fucking
beacon of hope.
Longing to get that fucked up excuse
of an escape.
And my ♥ SHATTERS
everytime you come to me
with those tracks you bear
enticing inspections.
[You like being called a junkie..?]
And my ♥ shatters again,
because I have done the same to you.
I had been this lost ghost;
A mere shadow of my former self.
With my own trainspotting arms
I wrap you up the best I know how
and wait for this moment in your life to end.
I want you to come to your sences
look in the mirror..
Realize baby.
You're. Not. Me.
[You are better than all of this]
{I promise}
Honesty please.
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Raw blunt and harsh
You are great at penning this type of poem
its flow, its imagery of thoughts rip threw me
The taste so bitter
Julie
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this should be a song
kept my attention and thats pretty good
i am now seeing stylistic choices that you make
and they work
so go you
keep on writing
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This truly is amazing.
I think It would be better withou the last two lines, but fuck it doesnt even matter.
I cant begin to say How much I liked this.
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great write i loved how you saw the other person throu yourself it was beautiful!
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i love this.
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i like it. [♥♥]
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"You embraced my tracks like a fucking
beacon of hope.
Longing to get that fucked up excuse
of an escape.
And my ♥ SHATTERS
everytime you come to me
with those tracks you bear
enticing inspections.
[You like being called a junkie..?]"
this is a good write,but i dont really know if its dirty or pretty enough,dont get me wrong,i like it,and you followed the expectations well,but im looking for really metaphorical dp.
also you forgott the author notes.
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this is a great piece. wonderfully penned
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it's okay. i won't really have a seizure, i was jk. but it is quite rough on the eyes.
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I changed it.
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well when you do come back, pleas modify your font/bg, so i don't have a seizure or something from the brightness of this page. LOL
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ok. Im sorry.
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