As time filters away moments;
unspoken words silencing yesterdays.
Taught of past pretense lent,
lessons breathing hope.
Is there solace in redemption's tears?
Will mistakes of yore harbinger our tomorrow?
Author notes
prompt:
"the past is there for us to learn from, it is just what lessons we take from it that is the question?" Grey Mouser - 2008
10 entries
20-30 words
A contest entry
- prompt; 10 poets; 20-30 words by Grey Mouser.
475 points, ended July 11, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE GOLDS THREE by Swan song.
2000 points, ended October 5, 64 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A very fine poem thank you for entering
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You use your words to the fullest. It builds to the end, the last two lines are beautiful, and I feel the prompt in the poem. Very well done, and congrats on the gold!
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Wow... Hun this has such amazing depth to it... Truly thought provoking piece in so few words. Nicely done!!!! Congrats on the well deserved gold!
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Beauty!!
Love how You took the prompt and weaved a Powerful message
Especially regarding: lessons breathing hope~
Excellent!!
Also the question You posed gave much to think about
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Questions infiltrate and propogate with insistance till worries create problems in sanities obsession. Wonderfully written and many thanks for entering the contest.
Be well and be blessed,
Mouser
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Wonderful
Such a great creation for the prompt. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest
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A very creative take on the prompt. I really enjoyed how it ended with the questions. Questions we all need to ask sometimes. Great write!
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