What if that thing happened in real life?
But you said that you wouldn't get mad.
I wonder would that make you mad or sad?
To you this would probably feel just like that knife.
Just that knife touching up against your skin.
I wish that i had never of done that.
My tears fall as the sound of spat.
I'm sorry for causing that horrible sin.
Now I sit here and all I do is cry.
I am afraid to tell you about it.
All I want to do is just quit.
Because this pain makes me die.
So I'm sorry for this pain I'm causing.
Don't let me make your events have a pausing.
Author notes
Okay, poem not exactly be such like the song but it kinda reminded me of the song. ^^
A contest entry
- Does Love Exist Anymore??? by Lyrical Rain.
600 points, ended July 20, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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A very interesting poem, I can pick out a few good lines in here. Overall, I think it needs a little work, just a bit of tweaking, but it is a good poem!
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I love this. Im not leaving long comments so dont be offended. Its just hard to read some of this stuff on the count of me trying to make myself get over this heartbreak. But I really do love this poem and you did an excellent job with the emotions.
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I understand completely about the whole heartbreak thing. Don't worry I won't get offended comments are comments long or short they're all the same to me. ^^ Also if you need anyone to talk to you can come to me. ^^
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Hm, very interesting. It sorta makes me think of when I use to cut... weird eh? I dunno... the knife part got me thinking like that. haha This was awesome though, I liked it. It reminded me of some stuff I write about. haha Keep on writing, untill you can't no more!
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~Make Peace, Not War~
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