waving in the breeze
white petals grip the circle
garland aroma
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kendhal22
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A contest entry
- Haiku Contest ---for Visions through Haiku Members only. --- (Those who wish to be a member, apply through the application link inside) by Harrisham Minhas.
475 points, ended July 9, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh. This is a pretty cool poem that you have going on here.
It's a haiku, isn't it? I'm really fond of form poetry. Though I'm not really good at it myself. lol I like the different angles you used for images of the tropics. You got me to stop and think about that one. You did a good job of expressing yourself here.
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excellent haiku, you really have chosen your words wisely to describe your subject. The verbs 'waving' and 'grip' are especially evocative in recreating the sense of movement and character. I'm not surprised this has won a gold, it's extremely well written. Shows you don't always need to have swallowed a dictionary to evoke a thing of beauty. Great write and thanks for sharing
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thank u
Thank u for ur wonderful comments given to my ku. I didn't realized that I did that untill u pointed out to me. I'm suprised that I did that. Given such clarity response to the ku that I didn't realize untill now. Kendhal22
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It's a lovely sentiment. Congratulations on your win. Happy trails
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economic and evokative...no kiga..but i like ending the middle with circle, picking up on that image with garland, and ending with the lingering aroma...it leaves you pondering the cicumstance, and for me, led my mind to a memorial.
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thank u
thank u for liking my ku. To me this reminds me when I was in Hawaii on year. the leighs are beautiful and recalling my memories with my kids at the beach. Kendhal22
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its nice to see a haiku - yours paints such a beautiful picture and it has great aroma. Very nice indeed.
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Oh, I hated this at first, but if it's short to follow specific length rules then, good job, it sounds alot different when I know there are limitations.
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thank u
thank u for ur comments to my ku. Soon as u do this form poetry u won't hate that much. It keeps me structured when I can't seem to write. Kendhal22 -
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I really don't hate it at all, I just didn't realize what it was at first.
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Thank you for your Haiku:
waving in the breeze
white petals grip the circle
garland aroma
Well-expressed with a freshness.
Thanks again.
Harrisham Minhas
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thank u
thank u for the wonderful comments and applaudes given to my ku. Kendhal22
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excellent
words choice wa sgreta...and so was the meaning well done.please vist some of my poetry as well. -
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thank u
thank u for ur wonderful comments to my ku. Kendhal22
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